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.The Curse Returns

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Summary

A cult. A detective. A boy. A killer. Two families. Who will get killed? And more importantly who will kill them ?

Status
6yrs ago
Chapters
5
Rating
4.0 (1 review)
Age Rating
13+

Prologue- Moving Away

Moving trucks cloud the area around our house.

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Awakening the feelings of how badly do I want to go to my bed and sleep. How I would convince my parents not to move.

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Its been a tough job of the ten times we have shifted I could never convince them.

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They did not shift much till I was six year old. Just once maybe, so not a big deal but as I grew up they kept shifting every other year.

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My dad's the head journalist in a popular newspaper and instead of asking the people under him to move around and get some news, he tends to do that himself. The reason of which, I can never understand.

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It was the first sometimes but now I am used it.

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But what I don't like about moving is the spooky houses we live in.

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Dad loves to investigate about these houses and their backstory and it does earns him a nice sum of money but because of this he always moves to some spooky place with weird people.

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I wish I didn't have to go there.

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Well the new spooky place here i come.

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But I didn't know this time would be so different.

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author

You do a good job concisely communicating your story's premise. My only nitpicks are about formatting: you often break for a new paragraph where you don't need to, sometimes just one sentence per paragraph, and it makes the pacing feel janky. Usually, you only break for a new paragraph when a new character speaks, when a new action is performed, or when a new train of thought begins. There are stylistic exceptions, of course, but this is a good rule of thumb. Other than that, just grammar and punctuation errors: I'd recommend trying out a program like grammarly, which will catch a lot of that for you with less hassle.

6 years
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author

A dad like that and me will never get along id rather live in the streets than live with ghosts who knows what they can do

6 years
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author

Interesting. Definitely need to polish the formatting and grammar. Also, how many moving trucks? When people move a lot, they usually (but not always) get rid of a lot of stuff so it's easier to move in the future.

6 years
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