What is your opinion?
Intriguing plot!
"I like the setting to your story! I can almost feel like I'm there. Plus, the plot is really nice. Keep it up!"
Praise-worthy!
"As a beginner, your passion towards the story is amazing. I liked the plot-building and characters especially little Oliver. . Mystery and Thrillers? I'm on! Keep Writing! Here's wishing you luck on your journey of writing! Regards; Stay safe...Waiting for your next chapter!"
excellent
"Excellent"
Dialogue
"Your book is very interesting and this is a good beginning i have got to say. Why not try to seperate the dialogues for example “Dad is mom going to be okay?” Charles said staring at his father who was crying “She will be fine my boy everything will be alright” replied his father assuring him It makes it easier for the reader to keep up with the dialogue you feel me. I am living your book so far. The prologue needs some corrections it terms of gramma it has got some errors but i love it because it captures the attention of the reader and makes him/her want to read more."
Very Fun & Intriguing Read!
"The story itself has no problem with it. I love Oliver as a character, Ophelia is also great. The magical realm needs a little bit more work to match up with everything, but it's not bad. The setting was fantastic, the writing very detailed which is fabulous! However, there are areas where it needs a bit of work. Take for example that there are excessive amounts of unnecessary sentences that are redundant. Plus, the lack of dialogue marks and not marking it as such makes readers confused. Sometimes, I was thinking it was another part of the description or a character's thoughts, without knowing that they said it out loud. I think that needs editing and spelling also needs a bit of work here and there. But that was the only flaw with the story. It made reading not so smooth, but the opening was still very pretty and the descriptions made it more real and intense. Well done! Keep up the good work! Much love, Coffee"
