What is your opinion?
Strong opening. Good Action Desciption
"I do not know much about the Musketeers, but this was a great opening chapter in its own right. The way you blended d’Artagnan watching Athos and Athos’ own movement was excellent. It’s no easy feat to have an action scene that is being described by a character that is watching it and keep it from being nothing more than a list. The writing was very fluid and much like Athos’ sword, it flowed gracefully from one area to the next. I also really appreciated the parallel between d’Artagnan so closely watching Athos and in turn having Athos watch d’Artagnan. It created a good sense of a developing kinship between the two that they take the time to notice each other in such a way. You keep a good balance between describing the scene and not overworking with details. Excellent work and I wish you the best of luck with your further writing!"
Excellent
"I haven't read the Thee Musketeers for so long so this was such a lovely, refreshing glimpse into their lives. I love how d'Artagnan was dedicated enough to memorise each step of the sword and how that was destined to change his life. I enjoyed the description, how you could feel the sword fight being played out before you. The magic of movements being described was incredible. You have a way with words that is pure poetry. The tension of not wanting to miss a single moment of the sword fight, not wanting to blink just in case d'Artagnan missed s second was so real. The panic that he felt when he realised Arthos was watching him practice was so real. I really love your writing style! Can't wait for more?"
