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"Hi, a really great concept for this story. We thoroughly enjoyed the idea of the incident which was so frightening, but your heroine survived it and almost seemed to thrive on it. This chapter is really good, apart from a few grammatical errors. But we can't see much plot because obviously you're only on the first chapter. We'd like to know something about where this story is going next. A last sentence at the end of the paragraph, giving us a clue to this, would be very helpful"