Wow!

"This was an incredible story from back to front, from top to bottom. It was so eerie and so immersive, I had a hard time pulling myself away from it. I loved the different twists you put in and, even though it was scary, it was first and foremost disturbing and it really hits you hard with how young the girl is and just different situations. I thoroughly enjoyed the story and I look forward to reading more from you!"

The Luciene Twins

"I loved this story. It was well-written. I gave it four stars on the technical question because there was one typo.. Otherwise, it was flawless. I read it all in one sitting because I couldn't stop. A great story and one of the things I really liked was I couldn't guess what would happen next. I'm looking forward to reading more from this author."

Touching story

"Innocence and dark destiny colliding in the hereafter. Well done! I have no more to say and 200 more characters to say it. mmmmmmmwwwwwwwwwwwwvvvvvvvvvvvvvvpppppppppp. yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrooooooooooooooooooqqqqqqqqqqqq."

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"Wow. WOW. Fantastic story. I hope to God it's not true. But fantastic story all the same."

Haunting!

"Although I saw some twists coming but still, it was an amazing story :) some parts gave me goosebumps >.< Loved it :) I think there was a lack of the narrator's feeling, Miss Mary I mean. Still, it was great as a quick read. Looking forward to more of your work."

The Lucienne Twins

"Very good story and three dimensional characters. I love supernatural tales involving children, as their innocence intersecting with evil or darker forces is compelling. Just be sure to look more carefully for typos while proofreading. Looking forward to reading more of your work."

A strange mixture of readable and, er, not readable

"Difficult to review this one. On the one hand, there was a lot to like here with plot and story and writing, but on the other it was a tough read. What I mean by this is it flowed, but sometimes was difficult to follow. I hope others will give a review so I can see if it is me or the writing at fault. That said, lots to like here."

Great Piece

"I really liked this piece. It fits within the theme well in a way that I couldn't compete with even if I tried. You pulled me in with this story the way I like and definitely applaud. I felt the need to read more, know more of the twins, to check if my suspicions of how the story was going to develop were true. I felt how my heart rate increased with new plot twists in the tale, which, to me, shows of a talent. No wonder that you have the most votes so far! I feel like your sentences flow very well, and I enjoyed the descriptions a great deal. There were quite a few commas missing, though, and a few typos, and, as a beta and known nit-picker, I was a bit annoyed -- especially because I feel it does touch upon the quality of your work, which is otherwise very high-quality for flow and plot, as well as general style. If you could go back over your chapters and just fix the typos and missing commas, it would definitely raise your tale to the next level, again. Well done."

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