What is your opinion?
Interesting so far...
"I found your story quite interesting and you had me reading until the end. I can't fault your writing style at all and I didn't even notice any errors in grammar or typos, which meant I was entirely engrossed in the tale you told. So well done! If I have to nit-pick I'd say that you need to give the world your story takes place in a little more emphasis. You don't need much, just a few clues here and there would give your story a context I relate to or imagine as a reader. Also the girl in the first half needs something about her I can like, instead of just feeling sorry for her. And that was blatant cheating what Kelly did to Allister! Anyway, thank you. I rather enjoyed it, so keep up the good work! I'm sure your writing will only improve further with the wisdom of age..."
I´m am intrigued.
"This was really very good. I would have given five stars, but I think you can do better. Grammar and such was very good, I only caught a few misstakes and none of them were big enough to disturb the flow of the story. The writing style is very good and has a nice flow, though it could always improve. Try do find a signature, something that stands out. The writing is very good, but it lacks indentity in a way. Try to find your signature, read stories on here to see what I mean. Plot seems good so far, I especially like the second chapter. The first chapter was good as well, but it felt a bit like you were fumbling, trying to figure it out as you went along. The first chapter just feels plain compared to the second. Also try to work on the characters in the first chapter. In the second we get an established relationship and bits of personality, but it feels like we didnt get that with the first one. All in all, good job. Putting it on my reading list and will update as you progress."
