What is your opinion?
Not a bad tale
"This is an interesting tale. It felt a little off with the interruptions, but I got used to them. My main problem is that the chapter seems to end a little too abruptly. Other than that, the story within the story is good. You get an idea about the characters and the world(s) involved. Can't wait to see more."
Beginning Remarks
"Hello, So a good start to this novel. I like the concept of the two different worlds and wanting to explore them. I'm wondering maybe the prologue should be more about describing the two different worlds rather than bringing the two boys in right away. That way the reader gets a sense of what the two worlds are really like and a description of them. Then you could move into the first chapter of what you already have. Just a thought. I would also suggest to reread it and maybe read it out loud. I find that is the best way to make sure that sentences make sense. All in all, a good start. Can't wait to see what the rest of the story has to offer."
