What is your opinion?
War
"Not at all a bad read. I thought that the narration was very vivid as well as realistic and I liked the main character's ferocity when facing the aliens in the Gungram. Very well written. I think the story line is pleasant and the characters are 3-dimensional and likable. No Mary Sues here. Well done. One thing I didn't like was the fast pace of the story. In the beginning, it felt rushed. Like you didn't bother to take time to slow down and fill us in on the characters' background or the main point of them being there or the story itself. I would've liked to read about the details surrounding the current events. When exactly did the aliens attack? Why are they doing this? Is there an end to their invasion? etc. Another thing I didn't like,though this one is small and easy to fix, was the errors. Nothing with punctuation really, but the grammar was off in a few places. Luckily this didn't take away from the story. Nonetheless, I enjoyed myself and I think this story has potential of becoming a really awesome novel with the right hook in the right place. Keep writing and I hope many more writers have a chance to read this and enjoy it as much as I did. Well done!"
Liking this so far
"I have no idea what's happening so far (except for aliens attacking, and this being particularly painful at 3 in the morning) but this works. You haven't done a great big info dump, which I think would detract from your opening, I'd expect more details of what exactly this alien threat is in later chapters, and the start leaves me wanting to read on to find out more information on this. Instead, you've concentrated on getting right into Lux's head. Which works. Pretty obvious he doesn't like General Asshole (what's his REAL name again? Yeah, General Asshole is gonna stick). Can't say much more on one chapter, but good start so far."
A promising start
"After reading through some of your fanfictions, I look forward to giving your original work a shot. Seems like it's going to be quite a ride! Already your main character seems spunky without being annoying or rude (a truly difficult thing to accomplish) and I want to know what kind of a world has aliens attacking at 3 in the morning. I'm looking forward to hearing more about it."
