What is your opinion?
Super!
"I´ve always loved a good superhero story and this is shaping up to be one. Good for you, superhero stories arent easy to write as their most common format is television. I didnt really get much sense of the story yet, hence only three stars. I´ll put it on my reading list and update as it progresses. Grammar is great, I couldnt find anything. Writing style is also very good, though as always it could use work. I rarley put five stars on writing style. Try to experiment a bit, at the moment it doesnt really have a personal feel, it very textbook. This of course also means that its very good, but a bit non exiting. I shall update regarding the story when I get a feel of it, but please, dont focus all of the story on the love triangle. Put some into the characters as individuals first, otherwise it´ll feel rushed and it will be very non exiting. You cant feel for characters you dont know. Keep it up!"
Great Start!
"I thought that was a great start. The interaction between Pink and the Detective led me to believe that there is an adversarial history there. The appearance of "Snake" as a villain tells me that you have some interesting criminals to share in this universe. I like Pink Punch!! She seems strong; sassy and wants to take out the bad guys. I enjoyed the banter between her and the detective - and sense a tension here that you might build on. I hope you continue!!"
