What is your opinion?
Wow!!!
"I’m really enjoying this so far!! I love your use of imagery, the descriptions are vivid without bogging the story down, so great job with that!! Ethan and U are very well realized characters and I love how they develop throughout the story. Great job with that!! Also, I’m always on the lookout for an original story, and this was it!! Great job! :) "
Good characters and interesting premise
"Like the way you introduce the story. I feel that introducing a story by talking about the characters is important. And you have a solid short setup that I love. I like that it continues with the second chapter until the real hook. Either way, I think a book is as good as it’s characters and you do a great job with Ethan and U in setting up a good story."
Galactic heroes a beginner guide
"I don't like this part "
So Much Potential
"This author can write well, no mistake about that - what was mildly frustrating about the read was how much more I wanted from the story. Like many stories, the first chapter involves a solitary Main Character; why do so few give their MCs someone to *talk* to, so that the world can be revealed to us rather than dumped in our laps? Draw me into the story! There was a lovely Douglas Adams vibe that kept me involved, the writing is humorous which is hard to pull off, but I want to be *drawn in*, please! Lots of telling instead of showing, at least one fairly jarring POV change mid-paragraph... And most frustrating of all, the writer gets me to care about the characters and I wait and wait and wait and wait for something to happen! What do the main characters want? What is it they're striving for? Some stories are just poorly written and easily discarded. This one was harder (for me at least) because it's *so close* to greatness. Please keep writing!"
