What is your opinion?
Vampires first love
"You know I love all your stories and you probably already heard of the same exact things, punctuation and spacing. But I will say that if you are going to be switching characters to speak just put it as it’s own paragraph. Also the story is very interesting and keep up the good work. -Katherine "
Sexy
"Wow this escalated quickly, and it was pretty sexy indeed. It was good but as said before it does need some serious editing. All I can say is stick with it and don't give up, especially if you really enjoy writing. Also reading more stories does help you improve, you pick up on others writing styles. It will also teach you sentence and paragraph structure for future stuff you write. This is a good start don't let people's comments ruin your love for writing. My writing was terrible in the beginning and I am still learning. I still think I have a long way to go. You have the talent in you, it just needs to be refined more. "
Vampire First Love
"It's definitely an interesting story so far. I hope you progress with your punctuation, at some points in the story it's kind of muddled. Otherwise, a very intriguing story. Great work."
It has potential
"Thank you for this. I enjoyed your character writing and plot. Please have a look at published author's works to see how grammar is used in there works and when to put them in. It."
