What is your opinion?
Kerri Burch
"I like the story "
Ezra Black
"This story starts off following a fun stereotypical shy girl that any shy girl can relate to. She is absolutely adorable and you instantly want to root for her The first chapter of the book seems a little long like the author struggled to write a perfect first day of college. Within that chapter really is the perfect meeting of a best friend. The laughing and bonding brings me back to when I met my best friend. The warm feelings are there, but there can be too much of a good thing. Ezra is your typical rich and powerful guy who can't resist the sweet innocent girl. The meeting between the two characters is written in both POV's. Where it is important the know the inner thoughts of the characters, I found it distracting to read the scene twice. I would recommend the scene with Ezra's point of view. Olivia day dreams about that night during class, so that would be a good place to say how she felt about the encounter. Overall, I like the youthfulness of the story. It reminds me of high schoolers instead of college students, but that doesn't hinder the experience of getting to know the characters. Well done :)"
Yay
"I got so excited to see the update. 😁"
I so love it! Please upload more!
"I love love it! Shes a hot nerd and she attracts 2 guys which she doesn't know are friends and partners until they arrive at there destination and 1 she hates and 1 she likes. Oeh..cant wait for the next chapters... "
Nice!
"So far so good, the characters seem pretty relatable. :) "
Excellent start!
"Ahh what can I say except I am loving this story so far! I adore the awkwardness of Olivia, she’s super relatable and just a total sweetheart. Really lovely and enchanting characters - looking forward to more :) "
Engaging first chapter!
"(On-going; read the first chapter) This was an engaging opening chapter. The author's use of realistic dialogue made the characters very relatable. The first-person narrative style created a personal atmosphere, which suited the piece very well, as did the italicised thoughts used throughout. The pace of the story is good; though only the first chapter, the author has managed to develop their characters well, as well as giving some background information without it coming across like an info dump, so fair play with that. I also very much enjoyed how the chapter didn't focus on introducing the potential love interest but rather the MC's (Olivia) new roommate. This stood out to me, as most stories would tend to delve right into the romantic angle, so I thought it was a very refreshing change to see friendship prioritised over relationships. All in all, an interesting first chapter that sets the tone for the rest of the story. Great job! :)"
Great so far
"All good so far. But if I had to give my two cents - Maybe the internal monologues can reduce. "
loving it 😩😍
"I liked that as a reader I got to see a more realistic side from the male protagonist,,, about his thoughts ,,, I also lived that I had a little adventure with the female protagonist,,, like going to the cafe ,,,and generally the episode where she meets Liam was fun ,,, now as to what I disliked dear author is that the protagonists thought were very repetitive,,, by that I mean for example black Knight going through every word in his mind that Olivia had said ,,,, I'd recommend this story to a young teenage girl who loves reading a good romance book like myself,,, thank u dear Author for taking time from your schedule to keep us readers entertained ,,, can we know when u next update ,,, do u have a schedule or u update whenever u have time bit not a particular schedule ? take care of your health ❤❤❤"
Good Start
"I can see where the plot is going, although this trope is used a lot in romance books so I'm hoping you add a twist to make it more unique/original; but since it's only five chapters in I can't really tell. The narration needs to be fixed a little, I think the narration is a little too casual, but then again everyone's inner dialogue sounds different, so it might work if you clean up the verb tenses a bit. You write in the past tense when the book occurs in the present, which makes it strange to read because it sounds like everything is happening in the past - So I think that's a really important thing to fix so the plot can be appreciated more. Good work!"
nice start
"Nice first chapter. It was refreshing to see something different. I like the ow relatable your characters are. Good job and keep writing! "
