What is your opinion?
I loved it..
"Impatiently waiting for the next chapters ... Wonderful writing"
The Unforged Crown
"I've read up until the end of chapter six, and the characters themselves seem interesting, and well developed. The problem I am finding though is that there are so many of them. The prologue didn't really make sense, and just as I was starting to get used to the characters, the POV, and the setting changed entirely. The chapters with Marlow, despite the POV change, in a way actually made more sense to me, as I could sense the plot and the confusion with Alex getting chosen as the next king over someone else. You have a very well developed world, but you are doing a lot of name dropping of characters we hardly know. The characters all know each other which is understandable, but the reader doesn't. Introduce the characters slowly, rather than all at once, and the book should be much easier for the reader to understand and enjoy. Keep up the good work, Sofia"
Weighed in the Balance; Found Wanting
"The author is definitely passionate about their characters. But the writing, so far, didn't measure up in my opinion. Other readers may disagree but a First Chapter list of characters...I don't care to read. Get me into the story as soon as possible! Introduce me to those same characters, draw me into them, save the Glossary for the end if at all. There were grammar and punctuation problems that pushed at me, keeping me from being drawn in; one of the most serious being the tense changes from second to first person and back. ('He knew death was inevitable', 'it would be days of agony watching your body') Considering Chapter Two as the book's actual beginning, there was lots of telling and not much showing. I want to feel on-scene, experiencing the story with the characters; in this case it was more like I was across a coffeeshop table from the author, as they told me what happened in their story. Switching between first and third person from one chapter to the next was also unfortunately jarring. HOWEVER; the author has created a rich world; it's a place I want to be. Well, it's a place I want to want to be, if that makes sense. Please keep writing!"
