I read the first few chapters, and it had a very good start, lots of exciting cliffhangers. The author also had a really good way of conveying the characters feelings, I could completely understand Henry's frustration at his parents.
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I somehow feel though that in a way the author gives room much information in the first few chapters. It includes a lot of flashbacks, and at one point a flashback within a flashback so it's slightly confusing for the reader to keep track of Henry's relationships.
There is also the problem of the author's vocabulary choices. Sometimes the vocab they use are too formal and sophisticated, twenty-year-old students don't talk like that no matter how rich they are. And sometimes the word choice is grammatically incorrect.
This can, however, all be fixed with editing, the most important thing when starting a story is a plot. If you have a good plot, then everything is just polishing and can come later. Keep up the good work.