What is your opinion?
Loved it!
"Good story, Stray. Loved your scene-setting, your protagonist, your ability to induce a sense of intrigue in the reader. Nowadays, starved of good horror stories, I found yours refreshingly scary and also entertaining. Looking forward to more from you."
Awesome short story
"I could actually picture this story taking place in my own town, which adds to the story when it feels familiar. It was both emotional and creepy at the same time. I would recommend it for all ages of readers."
Chilling!
"I read this story on reddit, and I absolutely adored it! It's definitely been one of those stories that have stuck with me, and I remembered it very clearly when I saw that you posted it on here. This story is fantastic and chilling (I hope that's not a horrible pun), and towards the end, I was thoroughly creeped out. I would just say that the exposition was a little long, and I would just worry that you don't get to the horror fast enough for some readers. I would maybe make this old man as creepy as possible, so your protagonist following him to the junkyard is even scarier. But that's just a recommendation, because I loved your story! I hope you go really far in the contest! :D Keep writing!"
I screamed!
"A wonderful story, blending the horror of childhood imagination with that of old age dementia. The old man's recount was chilling, and it was rather believable. His devotion to Helen represented the attachment we all have to childhood fables, especially those personal to us. The darkness of the refrigerator was terrifying - but part of it was ruined by the fact that we knew that the boy would be all right in the end. The grammar and punctuation was remarkable. There was a very clear division in tone and structure. The first part of the story, in which the store keeper decides to follow the old man, was vividly expressed. However, the old man's recount was lacking in style. Some sentences were very well done such as "Dark paranoia raised its head" and "I couldn't read it in his rheumy eyes". But such eloquence did not carry on when the old man began talking. His tale was grabbing in regard to content, but lacking in terms of structure. On the whole, I thoroughly enjoyed the story. The ending literally made me scream a little. Just as the store guy puts off the old man's tale as conjecture, the refrigerator doors open and the evidence of Helen's existence within are laid out, clear as day for all of us to scream at. Truly thrilling, straydog1980. You must write more stories - I shall wait!"
