What is your opinion?
I honestly love your book
"Your plot is amazing. It prefectly describe every emotion deep inside. There are some words really struck in my heart. Though I am still continuing reading you book, I can feel the mystery in it. And it really makes me feel excited. Keep the good work!"
Aria’s fav book Forbidden Territories
"Love this book! So captivating So mesmerizing "
Forbidden Territories
"I have been reading this story on Wattpad, and I struggled to put it down once I got started. I look forward to each new chapter more and more. The suspense is gripping, along with the little teases of information you get along the way. I can’t wait to find out what will happen at the end, which will also be a bitter/sweet moment. An amazing, romantic story!"
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"It's am amazing story. I like that it have a mysterious vibe. I also like the main characters of the story. The flow of the story is also good. I was not able keep it down. Great work!!"
Prologue and Ch. 1 Really Great Start
"Hi Pia. I found your story from your post in the Introduce yourself group. I am really enjoying the Forbidden Territories so far. Via is a great POV character. She's so open as a person, yet still a source of so much mystery with her mental fog. I love her yellow dress and shoes combo. It feels like a great embodiment of her outgoing and kind personality. Being a sibling myself, I also really enjoy Maya being part of the story. The tensions and comradery between them remind me of me and my brother. I love how they can tease each other and also be there for support, like Via taking Maya to her job at the bar. The "meet cute" between Zach and Via is great. I am always down for a good pratfall. The actions are well described and it gets the duo playing off each other in different positions than if they just met talked. I'm going to humbly offer a few suggestions on the editing side. First, I would make sure your characters names are introduced right away. When Via is woken from her ice cream daydream in front of the TV, she only refers to Maya as "my sister" first, then Maya later. I would introduce her as "my sister Maya" out of the gate. Second, when Via runs into Zach, its said that he is one foot shorter than her. Elaborate here. How tall is Via? How short is Zach. I get the sense that he's the one that's shorter, but a little more detail would be wonderful. Lastly, I made a suggestion on one of your last paragraphs. It's an exchange between Via and Trina. I really like the energy between the friends, but this exchange was a little awkward in its wording. Thank you for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your characters' adventures!"
