What is your opinion?
Very Good!
"I love the characters especially the main ones and I really like how you’ve written them not only in their personality but also how they interact with one another. They feel grounded and real and it makes the story so enjoyable to read."
September salt
"Great story! Great plot! Great characters! Loved it and would recommend to anyone! "
Good character development
"I was really enjoying this story. Interesting back story, nice slow build that keeps the interest. Gutted it has stopped and really hopeful to see more chapters from this story. Great character development. "
Just on point
"This book is really good, well written without any unnecessary drama. Just on point. Deserves a lot more readers! Congratulations to the author, I am impressed "
An emtional ride
"You did something that I feel a lot of people are hesitant to do when you created rather rude and immature behavior from both sides. Joey’s friends enjoy their gay bashing on one side, and Freddie’s friends seem to enjoy making fun of them in turn. Obviously one side is worse than the other, but a lot of times you end up only seeing one side acting like this so it creates clearly divided lines of right and wrong, and while that can be satisfying for the reader, it is less realistic and can take away from the story. So good job! You also did a god job of establishing Freddie as a likable and sympathetic character early on. Even more so with the reveal about his father (first one) and then the later reveal about how his father feels about him, which was pretty much a gut punch. For first person narratives that is really needed to keep the reader engaged. On the flip side with Joey you made him relatable in a way. He’s a person who makes stupid mistakes. He’s scared to go against the grain, even if what is happening feels wrong and uncomfortable. I think everyone has felt that way at least once before. I really liked the parallel with the father issue and when they refer to each other as ‘first name’ fucking ‘last name’ during their narration. As for what could be improved. I think once or twice the perspective might have changed without being marked as so, I remember being confused in one of the early chapters. The chapters that have multiple perspective changes sometimes feel like they could warrant their own chapters, but honestly that is a personal thing and I think it could work either way. A few typos here and there, like a ‘fact’ when you meant to put face. I’m not all that great at grammar and spelling either, but with a few rounds of editing or maybe I beta I’m sure you could get most of it. I really liked the line. “He was a coward and she was strong. And they had made me and I was lukewarm.” Especially in light of the conversation he later had with his mother. “ Sorry this got a little rambly. Romance is far from my usual area of reading, but this was worth the time. You left this on a heart breaking note, but there is hope there, I think. Good work all around. Also shout-out to cyanide and Happiness woot!"
Touching
"Nice characterization and the emotions of each character are realistic and heartbreaking. Unfortunately some grammatical errors do tend to take away from a touching read"
