Very good potential (draft review)

"I thought this was very well executed and interesting. I really liked the characters and the tone is true to the story. I couldn't stop reading it. The author has a good vision of the characters. I would just watch out for punctuation as there are a few missing periods and sentences that didn't flow. I'm assuming that's because this is a work in progress it will probably be fixed in the completed draft. Eager to read the rest."