What is your opinion?
Very Interesting
"I like Sinnera's fiery personality. I like that she has a friend that she can count on to be by her side. I did also like the fact that you wrote the part where she is storming away from a dinner with her mother instead of giving a huge list of reasons they don't get along. The pink haired gentleman does seem mysterious. I like that he isn't brooding, too many main male characters are the brooding sort. I like the banter back and forth. It is real personal. Hats off to you! I can't wait to see the rest of Sinnera's journey. There are some grammar issues, but those can be fixed real easy. I say you are off to a fantastic start! Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!"
Cute start!
"(ongoing, read the first chapter) This was a lovely start! The MC is introduced very well and she comes across strongly. I like that the writer gave away bits of information about her background without making it into an info dump - opening the first chapter on her leaving the dinner with her mother was a good way of showing the poor relationship between them, rather than just being told they don't get on, so props to the writer for that! The descriptions were well done, especially when describing the new fella she's met. He's interesting - quite mysterious, but not in a broody kinda way since they talked and teased one another a lot. The dialogue between the was well written and flowed well - it was casual and read like stuff you'd actually hear young adults say, so the writer did a good job in capturing that. Really good job with this - keep writing! :)"
