What is your opinion?
Interesting yet promising
"Very good beginning so far. Very clear about the interesting love story that is developing. Well written so far."
Great start!
"Wow, really great start! You defiantly paint a vivid picture with your writing. I can't wait to see where this story goes! My only problem is I don't think her having autism really adds much, I don't know if this changes later on though. All in all, great start and I can't wait until it's finished! Keep writing!"
“A bit autistic” isn’t a term you should use :)
"you could describe Abby better & you could have described the background - the place - where they were. I would suggest descriptionari.com it’s a website which could help new writers. From your use of terminology you seem young - you can’t use bit autistic. Autism isn’t a characteristic. It’s part of someone. I think it would be better if you took the time to slowly show that she’s autistic. Explaining to the audience how & different ways it effects your main character. Also, in the Chapter 1, it’s too short so it should be called a Prologue (just search up the meaning). I would suggest that Abby, calls out your main character’s name & make sure it’s clear. It’s a great start, you just need to take your time and write slowly with this one. "
