What is your opinion?
Good Work
"It's a good story really. To be completely honest, I don't usually read this genre but your book has piqued an interest in me. I like the way you framed the story. The way you still left an air of mystery around the whole thing does its job too. But, one thing you need to work a little on is the number of details in it. You could work on adding a little more about Alizeh's past. A little more about her parents and how her life had been before. You could also clarify why she hated her in-laws. Was it because they did something to her or was it just normal dislike to interact with people? The book is great and it honestly did its job in making me a bit frightened. Just a little more detail and would be absolute perfection."
Barfi
"First off, wow! I liked where this was going. The imagery was so real, and symbolism is a big thing here too! I really felt for Lizeh. She embodied a couple of things here! I’m not entirely familiar with traditions or some of the terms of endearment here. I’m also not entirely sure why she doesn’t like people. Or why she hates birthday parties for families. I get not liking to be around a lot of people, but to not like being around family is something I don’t understand. I love being around my immediate family. How did her family die naturally? Did they have a disease? Were they murdered by someone who made it look like natural causes? What was their dynamic before their deaths? Is her condition passed down genetically? I love that Daniyal loves and cares for her so much! He’s a doting husband. He worries about her, and he’s right to. She has a problem, and she doesn’t want to admit it. She doesn’t want anyone to know. It seems like you are displaying depression and paranoid schizophrenia. I could definitely see the schizophrenia. I felt all of her problems. This story was definitely psychological. You did a good job describing it. It needs to be fleshed out a little more, but all in all, great story! I can’t wait to see what all you do with it! Keep up the good work!"
gripping
"Great story! I wish it was longer. I felt for the mc. It was clear she is dealing with a mental illness, but they way you showed us life from her point of view was epic. I LOVE how you portrayed the other characters as she sees them, depending on her state of mind. I recommend this to anyone who likes to read horror stories. Good job writer!🌹"
