What is your opinion?
Great!
"Personally, I think it's a great plot needs a bit of tweaking, however I feel with the proper editing it will turn out great! Overall I think you should continue the story, keep it up! ☺️"
Playing with Death
"The story is coming up well. I am pretty sure when completed, it will make an interesting read, It will be too early to talk about your plot and character development, I am sure you would take these into consideration when building your whole story, A brilliant effort thus far."
Playing With Death
"Yesss! Amaaaaaazinggggg! Great job! Keep writing! -Wynter"
I LOVE THIS
"I love this chapter so much I think it's really good and I would recommend to people who like horror and romance.💖😄🌺"
Great start!
"I love how you used proper formatting, that literally made me smile like a moron 😂 (I guess that shows how much of a perfectionist I am ahaha) great introduction to the characters also! I’m curious about Liam and Liz too… please upload more when you can! "
Great start!
"I love how u set the scene and explained the characters feelings. I can already tell this book is going to be good!"
I LOVE THIS CHAPTER
"although this is the first chapter it is sill really good i love it and i am exited for chapter two its a good book for people who love romance horror and thrill."
READ NOW IT,S REALLY GOOD
"This chapter is so good i really love it. i would recomend this for people who love to read thrill books. i really hope chapter two will come out soon."
So good!
"Chapter 1 is so good, I can't wait for another one! I love how you describe the setting and feelings of the characters. Keep up the good work! :)))"
Nice plot!
"The story is still in its early stage but manages to capture your attention. Certain sentences are beautifully written. I like the character development and the Prologue had my curiousity piqued. The author has done a great job so far!!! Just a small suggestion, write in either the past or present tense instead of using both. Keep up the good work and all the best!!❤️"
Playing with Death
"Since a lot yet is to be revealed, I can't judge the plot well, but the prologue intrigued and hooked me, and you're off to a good start. Liz has this mysterious aura wrapped around her, and her walking to the cottage felt suspicious to me. You did a good job in delivering her feelings—your choice of words is mixed between simple and elevated, and with the figurative language, the images were forged in my mind vividly. I noted you use a lot of simple sentences that start with "I". This action makes the composition of paragraphs weaker. There are different types of sentences and you can mix between them to strengthen the composition. Pay attention to tense consistency—you switched between present and past tense. Regarding dialogue punctuation: Dialogue punctuation, tags, and action beats: cases on how dialogues should be punctuated. -If the sentence is a statement: "I made coffee," he/she/they/I/my mother etc... said. (Note the comma and no capitalization) -If the sentence is a question or exclamation. "Do you want coffee?" he asked. "Wow! You look so beautiful!" he commented. - If the dialogue is followed by action beat: "I made coffee." He reached for two mugs from the cupboard (capitalization and point) For more visit https://thewritelife.com/dialogue-tags/ It's a good start, and there's a lot yet for you to tell us and a lot of space for character development as well! Looking forward for more!! Keep writing!! :)"
Playing With Death
"I think the idea of the story is great. But the scene changed quite drastically so I had a bit of difficulty connecting the scenes. It will be great if the author can develop the scene slower so they can mush together. I only saying this because I would love to read more on the characters' developments and I know this story will be a great one in the future! I wish you good luck and hope to hear more from you XD"
Great plot, some constructive advices
"I’m one of the picky readers that pay a lot of attention to formatting of the story, so I think these few thinks might help. -paragraphs- during a conversation, if the speaker switches whatever they say should be written in a different paragraph. Which makes it easier for the reader to comprehend who’s speaking. -tenses- while telling a story it’s best to stick to one tense, instead of switching from past, to present continuous or infinitive. It makes the story flow nicer. -pronouns- avoid overusing them. For e.g.: instead of “I woke up at 9 am and decided to get up and get dressed. I picked up my hairbrush and went to the bathroom.” You can write “i woke up at 9am and decided to get up and get dressed. Picking up my hairbrush……” Otherwise, the plot seems nice. Keep ip the good work❤️"
Playing with death
"I`ve read the first chapter and like what I`ve seen so far. However, I cannot make a thorough review because I could only peruse Chapter 1. I hope to read other chapters soon"
