What is your opinion?
I'm A Girl Undercover In An All Boys School
"I really think this novel was great, the idea and everything, was just soooooo addictive, but the punctuation though, please use commas where necessary okay. By the way it wasn't complete when I read it and I saw a notification telling me it was updated...where the hell is the full novel??? Now I see just chapter one! "
Great concept
"I like the concept that you’re working with. I mean, a girl going to an all-boys school just to find out if her father is cheating on her mother? Simply amazing. Now, while I’m not such a big fan of stories like this, I did read through the first 6 chapters, and I have to say, your story is something special! I enjoyed reading about Claire and the many obstacles and difficulties she has to overcome just to enroll in an all-boys school. It’s heartwarming to see the relationship between Claire and her mother, and you’ve brought out this part of the story really well with your writing. If I had to give you one word of advice, it would be to read through the story once. There were just a few (maybe 2 or 3) typos that I noticed so far, and the story would be way better without them."
I'm a Girl Undercover In An All Boy's School
"The story concept was interesting and has potential. That was what first attracted me to try to read it. After that, it went downhill. First, get rid of all of the copyright mumbo jumbo up front. It should never have appeared.. I read the first two and most of the last chapter, and that was enough for me. It needs considerable editing, as the author admits, but this should have been done before the story was submitted, as the numerous errors, hundreds of them and the clumsy construction, distracted severely from the narrative. Punctuation is a major problem, along with the 'he said, she said' style of writing. The clumsiness stopped me so many times that I realized that I could never finish this story as it was written. So many 'rules' of reasonable english were broken. Never use a question mark and an exclamation mark together.. Use commas to provide separation where needed. Get rid of most of the Mom said, Dad said, juvenilia. When you use Mom, ensure that it is Mom, and not Mon. Please read a few English grammar texts, and some well-written novels to see how established authors construct their narratives and deal with dialog and description. You need to get an informed friend, or several of them, to read it thoroughly and suggest corrections. I am sorry to be so negative, as I am, but I am saddened to see such a good idea for a story bite the dust."
