What is your opinion?
Nothing Bad About This Book
"Ethan is a character that is highly relatable that gets pushed into moral dilemma after moral dilemma. It's nice to read because one like me who doesn't read a lot of dystopian novels, I've read Red Rising, Fahrenheit 451, Hunger Games, and a few others and I would have to say that I put this book at least top three among them. It's creative, immersive, and just epic to read. Enough said about it really. You should be reading instead of this review. Like, come on. Lol."
The Lie For Dystopia
"Futuristic Sci-Fi story with a great plot. I like the authors writing style, it makes it easy to picture what is going on in the story. The world is futuristic, with advanced technology, but the world in this story is painted as grim, affected by war, and people facing social injustice. Which is very likely would happen in real life after a devastating war. The rich just get richer and the poor get poorer. The main character Ethan is very likable and cares about the world and the people. Ethan also has a dark side, so, will being thrown into the middle of a war change who he is? Also, every chapter has a twist or cliffhanger that keeps you turning the page. Great job, can’t wait to keep reading."
Quick-paced Story
"Nice! A quick paced story that can keep your interest. Could we get a little more explanation of Ethan’s job?"
One of The Best Sci-Fi Books
"First things first, oh my goodness! That was so amazing and binge-worthy. This was an amazing representation of a true post-apocalyptic book. This author presented an amazing prologue that drew me in instantly and had me laughing in my seat and surprised at the twists the author put in. It had me in a trance, there was so much involved in this story so far and I can’t wait to see what else they put in! It takes a lot for me to read certain post-apocalyptic books, but there was no doubt that I would enjoy this book. From beginning to current chapter, it was continuously spinning with knowledge, drama and action along with funny characters that will make you smile and there are chapters that will make you feel sad and possibly want to shed a tear or two for these characters whole had a hard life. There was a few grammar mistakes but nothing to worry about as it didn’t take away from the story at all but if you ever go back and edit, I wanted to let you know. The story setting of this book was amazing and quite original, it was unique and I couldn’t stop reading, I like the fact the author thought really hard about the details of names, places and settings as its shocking to read and see how everything unfolded. Thank you for that amazing read and can't wait to read more!"
The lie for dystopia
"I am usually not a sci-fi reader. However, this is intriguing and very well written. I will enjoy reading through the updates."
An Original Sci-fic
"I've been looking for an actual sci-fi genre book for so long, and couldn't find any till now. Even with only three chapters, I can tell this is going to be a great story! -M-"
Dystopia
"Three chapters present at the time of this review. As we gather from the title of the story and the first lines depicting a world filled with radiation due to the aftermath of nuclear warfare, this piece is dystopian in nature. We are presented with Ethan, a gritty, ‘means justify the ends’ protagonist who has been severely warped by witnessing the death of his mother at a young age. I liked the way the author immediately set this out in the first paragraphs, clearly giving the character solid motivation and aim ‘to eliminate every last bio-weapon’ and ‘lock away every monster’ who used them due to this tragic event. In later chapters, the author utilises flashbacks to give more backstory here, and we get to dig deeper into the Eren Jaeger like frustration and hatred over the death of Ethan’s mother - the key event that drives him forward. I doubt, as the story is updated, that Ethan will become your run of the mill noble hero, as there are themes of immorality amongst ‘good people’ running throughout character dialogues in the second chapter. Could we have a possible anti-hero on our hands? As for the general atmosphere of the work, there is a sense of hopelessness and whiff of death around everything in these opening chapters. This is present not only from the nuclear backdrop and need for breathing apparatus in this world, but also in the main character’s internal dialogue. I’m intrigued to see if the finale of this story will be drastically different or if this hopelessness will prevail in the end. There’s also no shortage of action. I really loved the more adrenaline-fuelled second portion of the first chapter, especially the way the author built up the tension with clipped sentences and internal dialogue during the sequence. I also enjoyed the gory and to the bone description used throughout and in the following chapters. Watch out though, these are not for the faint-hearted. Aside from this, there is also some inventive world-building already being used this early on, and, avoiding spoilers, unique ideas such as the way echolocation is used. I was glad to see the author also had a sense of humour. I’ll leave you to find the eye-related joke that made me, unfortunately, laugh out loud when I was sitting in the library earlier today. The chapter length is longer than usual, but given this is a dystopian sci-fi novel, I feel this is the perfect length as it allows room for context and details of the world that would feel rushed if not for the extra building. In conclusion, I feel this story would be well-enjoyed by those who liked ‘The Hunger Games’ series as it embodies the military and resistance aspects especially seen in the second two novels of the trilogy. Thanks for the opportunity to read this, and keep it up! (As a note to the author, there’s a brief typo in the second chapter where the word ‘trans’ should be ‘trance’)."
Detailed Dystopian
"The story follows Ethan through a journey of self growth and self actualization building from a tragic backstory and a pipe dream in a dystopian world. Ethan is a character faced with a difficult world to live in creating the ups and the downs a reader loves to see a character go through and come out the other side stronger. He is faced with difficult choices a reader can hope never to experience for themselves. His journey is exciting and dangerous and entertaining. The author has put so much thought into the world and Ethan and the supporting characters, it is a joy to see but also, sometimes overwhelming. It is clear the author has a path he wants the story to follow and he is at a point in the creation of his novel where he gets to play around with what is important for the reader to know and what isn’t. And this is SUCH a fun time for an author to be in!!! I urge him to really question himself and ask, how important scenes are and how can he truly keep the reader connected to Ethan and his overall mission without divulging too much too soon. I also suggest writing out a “plot outline” template and trying to follow the structure to help with fluidity from event to event. One of the reasons I suggest this is, there are points where the timeline awkwardly jumps around to a point, unfortunately, I had to ask if the chapters were in the right order. Which, if so, could be a quick fix ;) I also suggest because of the major events that happened to Ethan before he joined the Alliance. Which one was the actual turning point? Lol. Another thing I believe the author could consider is separating the novel into sections. About halfway through the book, he jumps from Ethan to another character named Steve who, I honestly thought, was a simple supporting character. However, with the more Steve was mentioned, it was clear he is more than that. To account for this, there are many ways the author can manipulate how he wants the reader to see Steve. Option a: perhaps bringing him in sooner would be a good idea??? B: splitting the novel into sections to show how Ethan sees things and how Steve sees things? C: a chapter or a few chapters dedicated to Ethan’s life and switching on and off from the start?? So many possibilities!!! Which, again, such a fun time for this author to be in when the writing is there and now, I believe, ironing out the plot and the timeline will really make this novel soar. I look forward to see the creativity of this author grow and what he will manipulate this into. Such a great story and I, personally, hope it’s a series. Keep up the great work! "
The Lie for Dystopia
"This book is not what I would usually pick to curl up with, but it's exciting and fast-paced and thrilling. Extremely well done on those points. I like your vivid descriptions of the surreal world you've created. Now, I have some comments to make. 1. I'd like if you tried to be clearer. Conciseness is as important as length. Use strong words that convey a particular meaning, in that way eliminating lengthy descriptions. Also, the fact that, in the second chapter, our protagonist Ethan believes the war ended previously, while in the first, he thinks about the war as if it is currently happening, is a confusing point. The inconsistency here could make readers leave the book and go find something else, and you don't want that. Basically, what I'm saying is, maybe go over your story a few times to see where information does not fit together correctly. 2. It's better to narrate from one point of view. You have started off a chapter speaking from Ethan's point of view, and then randomly switched to Amber's and then James'. To preserve that aura of mystery it's often better to be showing only what one character knows and thinks. If you feel the need to switch between POV's, you should do so in separate chapters, i.e. one for Ethan, then one for Amber or something like that. It just makes the story more interesting and nicer to read. 3. Repetition is your friend and also your enemy. Repetition is great for making an effect, but to make said effect you need to know how and where to apply it. In the wrong place, it can just feel unvaried. Try to use a wide selection of adjectives to make your writing as great as it can be. 4. Grammar, grammar, grammar. Proofread, proofread, proofread. Your best friend but one that can be, at times, tough to tolerate. But believe me when I say this, the better your grammar, the more your readership. To finish off, I know I may sound like an English teacher telling you where you will lose marks, but let me tell you, often it's less the plot, and more the writing style, that ensnares readers. Take Anne of Green Gables for example. The plot is simply about a girl growing up, but it's the way LM Montgomery conveys Anne's thoughts and emotions that makes her so relatable, and makes the story such a great read. You've got a great story here, with a lot of potential, so make sure you get it to its intended audience. Keep doing what you're doing."
Great Job!
"I think your world-building is really good here and the plot is original. The movie it reminds me of is on the tip of my tongue... But alas I can't remember. Like the strong female character of Amber (we love representation of badass female warriors!!!) and Ethan is an intersting character and you do a good job of building mystery around him. There are a bit of grammar mistakes, so I think you need to go back and fix those because they do take away from the story a little bit. But nothing a round or two of editing can't fix! Overall, great job! Usually I leave really long reviews, but since I don't have many criticisms, this is short and sweet :)"
