What is your opinion?
Great story
"The chapters were short and sweet, wish that more world-building happened with a few more detailed descriptions like characters and backgrounds."
Outstanding ⭐
"This is a work of perfection. It's actually unique. I absolutely love it, you have great talent and good imagination.💫"
Nice!
"You've got a nice story here. I would love if you would space it out a bit. It felt awfully crammed. Harder for my eyes to read. There were a few grammatical errors I spotted, but I'm very picky, so it's probably not that big of a deal. I loved the personality of the characters, the emotions, and the details. Very enjoyable. I appreciated the heart the story had. It felt like I could understand the characters, even though I've never been in their position. I don't really know why I felt this way, but I did. I think your story is dreamy, and I hope you continue to write!"
This is going somewhere!!
"I do like this story and will add it to my library. This book is something that is worth reading in social studies {and getting in trouble for it😆}. However, there is a few things that need a little work. - The sentences are a little wordy. In case you don't know what that means, it means that the sentence contain words that aren't needed. For example, you've written things like "said a girl who was 5'1 and had brown hair and blue eyes" {this is just a fake example}. If you would shorten it to "said a girl", it would be easier to read and less wordy. - You have a lot of things in parentheses. The things {I have noticed} are also not needed and just makes the sentence wordier and harder to read. If you don't need to read it to understand the story, then get rid of it.:) But the good news is that the rough draft is called a rough draft for a reason. Keep up the editing, and i'll be happy to post another review in the near future. Your plot is great, your style is easy to follow, and the punctuation is better than a lot of skilled writers. It's only your grammar that needs work {wordiness}. Keep it up!!"
