What is your opinion?
Different take on vampires
"First, I apologize profusely to the author for taking such a long time to review this. The writing by itself was good, considering that I believe English is the author's second language. Kudos to them by the way since English is the hardest to learn. We get to learn more about the characters as the story goes on, though Ayame's appearance was a little abrupt. The biggest thing that would make this read even smoother would be to separate speakers. Make new paragraphs each time someone speaks so it's not all run together and the reader becomes confused as to who's speaking. Something else I would suggest is to use commas inside of your quotations when a phrase like "he said" or "she said" follows. For example, "I told you I was done," he said. Just doing those two changes will make a world of difference. Everything else is minor commas. I do think this will be an exciting book once there's more written and we get a sense of how the main character reacts to his sudden changes. "
Captivating
"So far there have only been 2 chapters posted, but I have found this story very engaging. I feel like it has taken a different approach than you're typical vampire story, it seems the main character is a guy, not a girl. Which I love! However, with that being said it's only the beginning of the story so it might take a turn. There is a few grammar errors but nothing too major to not be able to understand the story. The story is very well structured, with interesting characters, a great plot, and easy to follow along, which I appreciate because I tend to lose focus when reading. ☺️ Overall I would recommend giving this a read! "
