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Galactic: The Superhuman Robot

Very interesting story that holds your interest. It's scifi, but it could come to be someday. The writing style and technical writing skills and plots are excellent. In addition, there's information about the solar system, the Big Bang theory, Andromeda, the Milky Way, and more. Teenagers will love this as there's also a love story. It definitely should be published.

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Ileo

I'm not sure of the title here. I though the book was extremely well written. You're a terrific writer. I didn't read the last few chapters but got the drift of the book.

That said, the subject matter didn't interest me. It was sad. Perhaps you could have started with the guy coming into the store and being interested. Perhaps you could say some funny romantic lines and have more of a dialogue, such as.
I thought, "What a hunk. I could be interested in him.:" Sentences like that,

Or, "Just looking at him excited me. I was love at first sight."

I agree with the other review. The first lines are very important, Get the reader interested. Then later on you can have a flashback on what happened in your home life, but people don't want to know the details of unpleasant events.
I'm trying to be helpfu.l. Your grammer, technique and writing style are amazing. Just make the story more interesting. Good luck on this and maybe you can edit it.

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