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For never

i wish I would have known this was book #2 before I began reading because it made the beginning very confusing. The plot was not outlined as to where things were going with the story. I hope by the time I finish reading book 1 you will have edited book 2 and finished book 3. There are lots of spelling and grammar errors as well as his when you mean hers and vice versa through out the book that need to be fixed. Also when you said "he said" or "she said" it should only be when there are two people talking and no one else present. There were parts when I couldn't figure out who was speaking.

You've got potential to write some good stuff but you need to work on the things mentioned above.

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Learning to Love

Now this one was really good! Yeah, Adrian punched out her dad! I loved it! A few spelling and grammar errors but this one was more well done! Keep it up!

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Daddy

Loved it! Older men were always a big turn on for me when I was younger! Wish I could have found a keeper like Keon!

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Exceptional story!

I enjoyed this story more than any of the ones I've read so far! Found very few spelling errors which made it even more of a joy to read! Will definitely be following more of your works!

Hope you will find time to check out one of mine!

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Oh no you didn't!

Besides the needed grammar editing required for this story, it was intriguing to say the least. I can't believe you ended it like that and have not posted when the sequel will be out? Please tell me soon!

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Unique story

The concept of the story is good and the characters personalities are well described for the most part. Kind of hard to get a handle on the "looks" of each one but the overall story is very interesting. I look forward to having unanswered questions answered in the next edition to this series. Grammar needs a lot of work.

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My Cats Protect us from the werewolves

Definitely very different from the many werewolf books I have read so far but it was hilarious and I thoroughly enjoyed every chapter. So many unexpected twists and turns, each one just plain funny! Loved the authors sense of humor. Spelling and grammar errors galore but was still a joy to read!

Do hope you will check out some of my stories. Not nearly as funny but hope you find them entertaining just the same.

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Sirens Lust

Great story line but English is definitely not the authors primary language. It's also very apparent that she knows little about the Hawaiian language or culture as many names are either misspelled or just incorrect. There is no D or Q in the Hawaiian language. The way the people spoke in this story doesn't even come close to how they would sound if you were to visit the islands.

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Mate Hunt

Excellent story with many interesting unusual twists and a shock ending! Lots of grammar and spelling errors but otherwise, very well done! Look forward to reading more of your work and hope you will check out some of mine!

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The Hybrid

Absolutely loved this story! Lots of grammar and spelling errors but really enjoyed the plot of it.

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The Revenge

Excellent!

Really enjoyed this story. There were some spelling and grammar errors that should be easy enough to fix using google.

Very well done.

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Lorraine's Forever

Loved it! This could easily be made in to a full length novel and would love to read it. You did very well! Wish it had a little more on character's physical descriptions for all the characters but loved the way you described their emotions! Very well done!

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Sweet Dreaming

Enjoyed the story. Was really toned down compared to the series before this one. Lots of spelling, grammar and punctuation errors but was an enjoyable read.

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His Getaway

Really enjoyed your book. You mention there are other parts to this series but not the titles. Could you please tell me what they are? Are they before or after this one? As I've recommended to others who do series, it really helps readers if you identify which book of a series it is somewhere on the cover or Prologue.

Lots of spelling and grammar and missing words in this one but was a good read!

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Never Have I Ever

Really enjoyed this story even if some of the "Tommy parts" brought back some old bad memories for me personally, it made me wish I had found my James but too old for that now.

Good story line. Physical descriptions of men (Johnny and Graham mostly) could have been a bit more detailed but got the general gist of their characters and liked them all.

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Scotch on the Rocks

Really enjoyed the story. I swear I've read one very similar to it before but can't remember the details of it. Wondering what part 2 will be like, although I think it's fine as is.

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Bearington Bros & Their Fated Mate

Love the original plot to this story even with all of the punctuation errors of which there are many. At least right up to the cliff hanger ending (hate those) and I do hope that book 2 is complete!

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Shifter Mate Tri Totem (BK 13)

Oh, I'm so sad it's over but definitely see myself enjoying this series again but think I'll wait for final book (14). Hoping it's going to be about the impending war!

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Her Rockin' Shifter

This chapter was fun! Love Marry Beth and her friends coming in at the end like that! Can't believe there's only one more story to this series. I could easily see this as a new series on TV! How fun that would be to watch!

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The Last Dragon Shifter (BK11)

Loved this one and glad that you were accurate with the egg issue. Found several spelling, grammar and punctuation errors in this one but still really enjoyed the story. Wish there were going to be more to the series and I dread it coming to an end soon!

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Tate's Foxy Shifter (BK 10)

Loved, loved, loved this one! I seriously think you should take each one and expand on them and make them longer.

Getting depressed that there are only a few stories left to the series! But can't wait to read the next one! Looks like it's going to be really exciting!

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Made for the Alpha Shifter (BK 9)

Oh, I'm so glad Daryl finally found Ivy! Wish I was her! LOL Also wish I could keep my eyes open long enough to read the last 4 books but it's late and I have to be up early tomorrow. Will try to finish up tomorrow or Friday. Absolutely loving this series!

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Running from the Shifter

I've been overlooking the spelling errors in all of these stories but this one really needs to be corrected since it's the title! You've misspelled Running. You have it as Runing.

I am so loving this series! Really looking forward to book #9 because of the super hot guy on the cover! Is that Daryl? Don't know where you are finding these pics but DANG! These are some HOT guys!

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Pucking the Shifter (BK 7)

This one seemed shorter than the others and what a surprise! Now they've added a ghost to the pack! Actually, he's the origin of the pack or something like that! Loving it! On to book #8!

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Shifting the Shifter (BK 6)

Another score! Loving this series and can't wait to read the next one!

Waiting for the last two brothers to find their Fated Mates! Good work! Keep it up!

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Dreaming of the Shifter (BK 5)

Loving this story! Is there a reason you split it into 13 books instead of making it one longer story?

Either way, i'm really enjoying it!

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Bearing the Shifter (BK 4)

A little confused with the last two chapters but guess they are actually the "hint" to the next book which I'm looking very forward to reading. Loving this series!

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The Shifter Bar (BK 3)

Love, love, love this series! Are the men on the cover representations of the main guy in the story?

Is the hottie on the cover of this one Dominic? DAMN! That makes the imagination go wild. I was checking out the other covers and I can't wait to get to book 9, now that is one HOT man! LOL

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Shifter on Ice!

Loving these stories! Can't wait to read the next one! Still wish the character descriptions were more detailed but loving their chemistry together. Makes me wish I was a Shifter!

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Shifter World Bk 1

Thoroughly enjoyed this story and look forward to reading the rest of this series! Can you describe the characters physically? I'm not getting really clear picture of what they look like except that the men are big and she's tall with blonde hair and blue eyes.

Can't remember seeing any errors in spelling or grammar which I have a bad habit of finding in others stories and rack it up to being a secretary for more years than I care to admit.

Would love it if you would read and review my story Magic on Changeling Mountain or any of the others I have written.

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Her Mythical Warriors BK1

Loved this story. Very original from anything I've read so far. The only thing I would suggest is to please tell us what "Psychi" and "apsycho" means? I tried looking them up but couldn't find a definition for either one. I'm really looking forward to reading book 2. I do hope that the two fairies figure out they are mates.

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Never Ago

Lots of loop holes, spelling and grammar errors but the story was good so far. I personally hate when books end with cliff hangers and feel this story could have been edited down to the two books being just one but then it's your story and not mine. I do hope book 3 will be finished soon so that I can find out what happens.

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Hunter

Wow! Really enjoyed the story and was surprised by the ending. I expected her to turn him around and make him see he was wrong. Very well done!

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On the run

Really enjoyed your story!

A little lacking on character descriptions and details about what she had been through but was an enjoyable short story. Keep going!

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The Road Between

Enjoyed your story very much. A little broken in a few places and needs some help with grammar and spelling but the story line was interesting and entertaining. I'm still curious to know who the unnamed person was that leaked the information about them going to attack the other gang that allowed "the monster" to get to Aviana (love that name!).

Also have no clue who the new people in the Epilogue are.

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Ember Rain

Thoroughly enjoyed your very original story. Some spelling and grammar errors but the story line was great! Needs a little bit more character description but otherwise was great. Look forward to reading book 2 which I hope is already complete.

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All but rejected mate

The second book is just as good if not better than the first. Really enjoyed both of them.

Still a few spelling errors but was an excellent read. So glad for the happy endings.

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The Silver Tower

Much better! Big improvement over book 1. Your spelling and grammar still needs some work but was much better this time. Also you detailed much better this time. Who was the mysterious character who had their tongue cut out? Did they have to get permission to leave or were they just allowed to go?

Still some unanswered questions but this one was much better than the first one. Please consider editing and republishing them both. Your story line is very original and interesting.

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The Scarlet Tower

The plot of the story was very good but the story itself is very broken up and hard to follow. You never tell where she collected all the different girls from or what their powers are. You mentioned one had water powers but the rest are rather vague.

You build suspense but then it just peters out instead of coming to a conclusion and you left the entire story unfinished. The end doesn't really qualify as a cliff hanger, more like a rushed petering out. You don't describe the "final battle" or the council's reasoning for letting either of them live after what they had supposedly done, which was also never really described or explained.

Lots of spelling and grammar errors. There is potential here to make a great story but it needs lots of work! Don't give up and keep trying!

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The Bad Things

Just as awesome as the rest of the series and love how you left the end open for other addition which I hope will be out soon?

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Their Silver Moon

I couldn't put it down until I finished it. Another great story! Would definitely like to hear more about Patricia and Seth and the twins. Also what about Jamie and Grace? Do they ever have children? Does Seth magically rebuild the pack house or does Alice design a new one for them? How does Seth's coven feel about his decision to join with the wolves? So many possibilities..................

I can't wait to read some of your other stories but first I need to sleep some!

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His White Luna`

Loved it even with all of the spelling and grammar errors! So glad they got back together! Can't wait to read the next edition! Keep up the good work. Do you do this on a phone?

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Contingency

I was thoroughly enjoying this book, thinking it was the last in the series only to find out there's one more and it's not done yet! Boohoo! Found several grammar and spelling errors but otherwise the story is great. Wish you would state who is speaking instead of posting someone's POV at the beginning of the story. I get so confused as to who is talking when it seems to change almost every chapter. Please hurry with the last installment.

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His Trans Boy

Really enjoyed this story! Definitely different. Keep up the good work!

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A Sterling Silver Love

Enjoyed the story but there are several missing parts, like what did he do to her that she sent her kids away from them? What ever happened with King Jason? Lots of spelling and grammar errors but was a good read.

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Thirsty

Great story. A few spelling errors but otherwise very well done!

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Diamonds Edge

Good story! I have a feeling her son is either psychic or part werewolf but don't understand how. Do hope book 2 is already done? Look forward to finishing the story. This one needs some editing to correct spelling errors but otherwise well done!

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Aaron

Good story! The Epilogue was out of place, being after Chapter 30 (I think) instead of at the end where it belongs so it was kind of confusing for a moment. It made the ending seem like a cliff hanger. Some spelling and grammar errors but was able to push through and enjoy the story.

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BYOP

Damn! That was so hot! Not sure what else to say............DAMN! Whew! Need a cold shower now! Am I'm not even gay or male!

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I bring sexy back

Good story! Like the way the two girls turned their lives around. Not an easy thing to do. Needs some editing on spelling and grammar but otherwise a good read.

Hope you will check out some of my stories and share your thoughts with me.

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Full Moon Scrifice

The plot of the story was good but the writing is poor. It's evident that English is not the author's first language. Needs lots of editing and revising! Could definitely be expanded on especially the part on what happened to the vampires or rogues who attacked the village. Kind of feels incomplete as if this is a draft. If it is, please revise and update.

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The Other Side

Loved the story! So good to finally get the other side out there (In other word, been her except for her ending!) Needs some editing because there were lots of spelling errors but was a good read!

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The Goddess of Beasts

Very good story but needs lots of editing. Lots of spelling errors, grammar and punctuation mistakes and some words completely missing. I see you left it with cliff hanger and do hope you will post the second edition complete.

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On your knees`

Loved it! Very well done and look forward to reading more of your work! Good job!

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Hood

It started off rather slow but then when she found out about werewolves, it finally got interesting enough to continue. Was hoping they were going to come up with a way for her to become a werewolf but guess she's doomed to stay human. Felt like the ending was kind of short and blah but overall was a decent read.

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Queen Luna

This could have been an excellent story but the technical writing needs so much work that it feels more like a draft than a completed story. It's so broken up that it's hard to read and very obvious that English is not the authors primary language. Suggest serious editing before you continue with another story.

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Mind Night Blue

Very well done but what actually happened to Juju and her wolf? She got kind of left out in the end. There is a part 4?

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Mind Night Blue 2

Awesome! Enjoyed this one as much as the first and looking forward to reading the last one next! Needs some editing to correct spelling and grammar issues and you have on repeated chapter that I've already commented on.

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Mind Night Blue

Wow! Have never read a vampire(Bampire) story like this before but loving it. Very original and after reading some of the reviews left here, I would like to say this is your story, write it like you want! Don't pay too much attention to what others feel they would change about it.

Looking forward to book 2.

Good work!

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Touch of Passion

I hope you take this as constructive criticism because that is how it is intended. You came up with a very original plot in your story but it's full of spelling, grammar errors and is so choppy that it's hard to follow the story. You left a lot of questions unanswered, the biggest one in my mind is how she could not remember that Michael had been her first sexual experience and neither of them recognized each other? It doesn't sound like she was raped and he doesn't seem the type to do something like that.

I would redo this before trying to post anymore stories but do revise. You have a great story line, but it needs lots of work! Good luck!

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Second Chance

This was a great teenage love short story!

I felt you really glazed over somethings (i.e.: Calvin's POV on her and situation in general.) It has a good plot that could (and should be) expanded on to make a really complete story. I',m curious to know how old you are? One of these days I can foresee you with a best seller, you might even be able to make it on a VERY PG 12 level but once you experience some more adult issues in life (not just sex) you will be an author to be on the look out for.

FYI-It's very unprofessional to add your "thoughts/comments" at the base of every chapter as if they are part of the story which they clearly are not! Take them all and summarize the as "Author's Comments" or as a Outline to your story. If you have to apologize for a chapter being to short, perhaps you should edit or revise it before posting it? And your story itself should lead the reader, not directions from you in a "footnote". Also, were you aware that "chapters" on this site can be up to 10,000 words long? {Notice "Writing style score"}

Keep trying!

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Before the fall

Enjoyed the book very much. Felt it moved rather slowly without giving much details about their reasoning but you find most out later.. Looking forward to reading the sequel.

Wanted to see them really "fall" for each other instead of hiding their feelings for each other but maybe that's just me I love a good romance story!

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The Whitlock Academy

Dang, girl! I think this one is definitely a 12 of the list of best reads! I know everyone who reads this wants to be (even if they won't admit it) Emma! It was HOT!!!!!

Hate that its the last story you have to read posted here but will look forward to future works! You have given the courage to post one I've been working on but it's not ready to go yet. Still needs an ending and editing and artwork, not to mention I can't decide on a title just yet. LOL

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The Proposition

Another 10 on the enjoyment scale! The characters are wonderful and I really liked Hanna! She's great!

Only one more story to go, darn it. :( Looking forward to reading it though! Hoping you will check out one or more of mine!

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Baby

When I first started reading this, I thought Braxton was going to be more like his brother and into the same dominance/submission thing and while he slightly is, it's not as much but I'm betting they would be if Keon and Enna enlightened them to what they enjoy.

Found several errors but got so involved that I didn't comment on them. Awesome job BTW.

I've only got one more story to read of yours and I'm hoping you are working on others that you will post soon!

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A Love Like This

WOW! Not sure what else to say but WOW! Not my scene for sure but was a very enlightening read. Didn't realize they allowed stories like this on here but looks like their are no boundaries at all!

I noticed several more spelling errors but got so tied up in the story, I didn't point them out. Sorry, like to be more help when I can but dang this story was something else!

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Omerta

Loved it. She turned the bad boy to mush!

I wonder what they name the baby? They both had great names!

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Sinnful Temptations

Loved it! Only thing I think was missing was a more detailed descriptions of his tats!

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Skyheart

Loved your story. Had a few spelling and grammar errors and there were a couple of places where it got confusing about who was speaking and it seemed the characters names got mixed up but otherwise, very well written.

Look forward to reading more of your work and hope you will check out one of mine and let me know what you think.

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On His Watch

Very good start to what could be a much longer book! If I were you, I would take this and expand on it. You have a good story base and are talented. Don't be afraid to really let your imagination go wild and have fun telling about their lives together! Did her other grandfather ever accept her? Did she have a relationship with him? What about Cassan? Does he ever find his mate? Oh there are so many possibilities........

Good book. Really enjoyed reading it. Wish there was more to it.

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Lucifer

Awesome! Loved it! Wonderful story! Parts of it made me think of parts of my younger years. You did it again and so sorry that I'm now of stories to read from you! Keep up the good work! You are a wonderfully talented writer!

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Just One More

Well, you did it again! Loved this story. Couldn't put it down until I was done. Even read part of it on my phone, which I hate doing, at the doctors office. I think I've only got one more of your stories to read and will be starting on it tonight. How's the 5th book for the Bad Things coming? Hoping you will have it up soon!

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Montana Skies

Another great story. Was a bit disappointed that the part about River killing Jax was more like a foot note when I had expected it to be more of a whole chapter. Very few spelling errors, mostly in the epiloge but did notice one more where she was talking about coming back from Dr.'s appt and the ultra sound pics being on her console.

I don't remember how it was misspelled but it was done the same way every time.

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Angel

Love it, except for the cliff hanger, but I will read the next one in line. Love your work and can't wait to read more. Lots of spelling errors in this one!

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Finding Ace

Loved it! But what happened to the baby she was pregnant with? More spelling and grammar errors and even found a few words missing all together but very well written and thoroughly enjoyed every chapter! Can't wait to read the next one!

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Queen of Bad Things

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I hate cliff hangers! Didn't need one to get me to read the next book. I'm very much enjoying this series and can't wait to start book three! Quite a few grammar and spelling errors in this one but was still a very intriguing read. I just hope they survive! Won't be the same without Ace!

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Ace Bad Things

This is not normally my type of story but I have to say that I was caught from the very first page! You kept the action moving all through the story and I couldn't put it down till I was finished. I understand that there is a part two which I look forward to reading tomorrow.

Really enjoyed it! Great job!

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I'll be home

Very sweet story but was hoping it was going to end with a marriage proposal if not the actual wedding. Some spelling and grammar errors but was an enjoyable read overall.

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The Pledge

Different but enjoyable except for the many spelling and grammar errors. Need better character descriptions because you're left to guess what they all look like other than having big butts!

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North Forest Alpha's

Enjoyed this one as much as I did the one about the guys parents! Very well, done. Only found one error and left a message in the comment on that chapter. Look forward to reading more of your works and hope you will check out at least one of mine. I'm inspired to try my hand at another werewolf or maybe a witch story!

Keep going! You are very talented.

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South Forest Alpha's

Wow! Great story.

Only found a couple of spelling errors.

I personally would have made Leilani a little bit more willing to push their dominance BS down their throats but loved these stories! Three for one, who doesn't appreciate that you didn't leave anyone hanging. The "gay" portion at the end was great!

Do you know what the Hawaiian names mean? I do, just wondering if you do.

Looking forward to reading more of your work and hope you will check out some of mine and let me know what you think.

Keleka Anakalea

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Sebastian, The Traveler

They seriously need to add a "LOVE IT" button instead of just "Like". You've done it again! Excellent original story that captured me from page one and held me until the end. I never wanted to put it down for a second.

Only a few spelling errors but otherwise was great! PLEASE tell me you are going to add more stories here? I see you only have 4.

GREAT JOB!!

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Warrior of the Damned

Very well done! Slight cliff hanger at the end but found no errors in your story as far as spelling or grammar! Was a very refreshing read a story by someone who can spell and use English! My only suggestion would be for more character "visual" descriptions.

I really do hope you will check out one of my stories! I would like your opinion!

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Fixing Locks

A BIG improvement over the first book in the series but very disappointed that it's incomplete when you have it marked as complete!

I was enjoying this one much more even though it still needs work on the grammar and spelling.

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Jaded Heart

This could have been a very enjoyable read but it was very slow to get started, more than half way through before it got interesting and only got really interesting right at the end then it ends of a cliff hanger?

Grammar and spelling are in serious need of help.

Story line was good but really needs to be condensed.

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Different

You are quickly becoming one of my favorites on here. Loved the story and look forward to reading Times Two.

I felt so bad for Jeremy and glad that you are going to explore that more.

Lots of spelling and grammar errors in this one but if you read over it slowly you will find them. Easy enough to fix.

Keep up the good work and please check out one of mine! I would like your opinion.

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The Sluts

Good story. She doesn't really qualify as a slut but Emma did! Women have needs, just like men. Just because they choose to have more than one partner doesn't make them sluts, I don't care what anyone says! YOU GO GIRL! Life is too short to end up not having lived it to the fullest! Sometimes the end is happy, sometimes not but at least she lived it to the fullest!

A few grammar (mostly misspelled words) but was a very enjoyable quick read. Will definitely check out more of your work and hope you will check out some of mine and leave a review.

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Three Brothers One Mate

Thoroughly enjoyed your story. Very well done! Kind of curious to know whatever happened to her brother but maybe that's another story? Was glad that they let Cole back in. It just didn't seem complete without him, especially when you consider that the oldest two children were his.

A little bit of spelling and grammar errors but wouldn't be hard to fix.

Look forward to reading more of your work and hopefully you will check out some of mine. Let me know in a review please!

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What am I?

Fun story. Could be expanded on but it was a nice short read except for the bad grammar and spelling. Keep trying, you have a good imagination.

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My little Omega

Was a fun read for the most part. Needs LOTS of work on mostly grammar and spelling but also need to work on the flow of the story. Much of it seems like individual thoughts written over time and pieced together.

Keep trying and perhaps edit this one in the future?

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Alpha Jace

Really enjoyed the story and I do hope, now that you are older, you will go back and edit out the many spelling and grammar errors as well as follow up with the story of their sons since you left a cliff hanger at the end.

Need to break down the paragraphs more. Makes it really hard to read when they are so long.

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Very different

Really enjoyed this very different story! A few spelling errors and I really do think you need to reconsider and put the English translation in for those of us who do not speak French but it was a very interesting and enjoyable story. Will look forward to reading more of your work and hope you will check out one of my stories as well.

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Perfect Mates

Really enjoyed this edition of the series! Also checking out the Patreon site you mentioned. Thinking about signing up myself. How's it working out for you?

Hope you will check out one of my stories and let me know what you think.

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Beta Mates

Enjoyed the story even if it was a bit "choppy" and grammar and spelling errors made me cringe, wanted to fix them but of course I can't.

I only read completed stories but will keep an eye out for more of your work.

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Alpha Mates

Whew! This story was HOT!!! Kept thinking "why can't straight me be so open with their feelings"? Grammar needs help and lots of spelling errors and you definitely need to make it clear as to who is "speaking" through out the story as it got kind of confusing very often in the story. Definitely different but very interesting. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

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Taking a chance.....

What a sweet story! So glad he finally got over his fear! Only found a few spelling errors and the only other suggestion would be to take the single line before the final paragraph (before the Epilogue) and move it to the very end (before the Epilogue).

Glad that Josh also found someone, would like to have read how that came about, since he seemed like a nice guy!

Good work!

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New, different and Great!

Changing my review to EXCELLENT story! Thank you for posting the final chapters! I really enjoying reading the rest of it. Hoping book 2 is about Hannah finding her one true love!

Just my opinion, but if you are not going to post a whole story on here, then you should remove it entirely. I don't know if inkitt will allow it or not but you could just post a (perhaps longer) summary and let people know that it's available for sale on a different site.

Would also like to hear about how you were able to get your book published on Amazon. Were there costs involved?

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That's it?

Rather slow moving and it ended with so much left to tell. I was finally getting in to it and suddenly it's done? Is there a sequel?

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Loved it!

I know I"m going to regret staying up this late to finish this book but it was so good I couldn't put it down. Just hope I don't miss my flight in the morning! Good work!

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I want more!

Loved this one! She got the bad boy and tamed him! Love it! Hate that the series is over because I want to hear more!

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Loved it!

I only found a few typo's but the story was so captivating that I didn't even slow down. Loved it!

Can't wait to read the next one. Hope you are liking mine. I saw where you added it to your reading list.

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Another high score!

Loved it! Characters physical descriptions are needed but the plot is great! Really looking forward to reading more of this series. Going to be sad when it ends.

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Awesome!

Can't even express how much I enjoyed this book. Details like how they look were not detailed enough so the mind is left to it's own imagination. Was rather disappointed that she never got her wolf to shift but the series is not over yet, right? Very much looking forward to reading the rest of this series! You are a very talented writer! Keep up the good work but hope you will take some time to check out at least one of my stories!.

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The Mating Games

I was really enjoying the story. I can't believe you left it without a finish I was sure it was marked complete when I first started but now I see it's an ongoing thing Please let me know when you finish entirely.

Good plot and reasonably character trait descriptions.

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Delta's Deceit

I do hope you plan to rewrite these stories and fix the grammar issues because the stories would are a good read and have good plots.

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Gamma's Game

Whew! The grammar in this one made it very hard to read. I can see how the different stories are related and have to say, they could easily be combined into one book once the grammar errors are fixed.

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Beta's Bride

Just like book 1, this one needs a lot of work on the grammar but it was an enjoyable short read.

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Kasun's Kisses

Grammar needs A LOT of work as it is apparent that English is not your primary language but overall it was a good story. A little short on background information but a nice short read. Will look forward to reading more of the series.

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The Beta's Daughter

Very well written! Really enjoyed this story and look forward to reading more of your work. Hope you will check out one of mine and let me know what you think.

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Alpha Black

Enjoyed it as much as I did the first time. Still needs some editing and I don't remember the part about Jenny dying before but then it's been a while since I read it so I may have just forgotten. Anyway, moving on to book 2 now and I'm sure I will enjoy it just as much! You are a very talented writer. Hoping the names won't be so confusing this time.

Really enjoyed this story, even with all the spelling errors and some grammar errors, it was a very enjoyable read. Looking forward to reading book 2.

Hoping you will check out one of my stories. I recently put up my first werewolf story called "From Orphan to Luna".

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In the Heat

Excellent story! Really enjoyed this one and look forward to reading more of your work. Hoping you will check out one of mine. I just posted my first werewolf story today.

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Calling Callin

Oh please tell me you are doing a book 2? Want to know what she finds and if they solve the problem with the rogues. Grammar and spelling needs lots of work but the story was very good. Please let me know if there will be another book to finish up the story.

Also hope you will check out one of mine!

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Runaway Alpha

Needs considerable editing, mostly grammar and spelling issues but was an enjoyable story. Can't figure out why you ended it where to did because you left a lot of questions unanswered. I do hope you plan to do a Book 2 to finish up? Would love for you to let me know when it's done. Story line was very interesting with lots of twists that kept it interesting.

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Torn

Wow! Was so sad that Amaris and her mate died with so little fanfare. Glad that Leon and Ayla worked things out and that Ethan got his just desserts! Great ending.

Can't wait to see what happens with Lila and her mate. Sounds like a very interesting twist.

Keep up the good work!

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Caleb

Definitely different but I think that's what makes it such a good story. Really enjoyed reading it. Grammar, spelling and paragraph separation needs work but otherwise, very well done!

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Amaris`

Grammar, spelling and punctuation needs LOTS of work but otherwise was a very enjoyable read and I look forward to reading the rest of the series. Can't wait to find out what happens with Caleb!

Hope you will check out one (or more) of my stories! We seem to share a similar writing style.

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Wow!

A lot of sex but loved the story. So glad that everyone found their mates. You never did say what happened to Sarah but since she was such a minor character, I guess it doesn't matter. was just curious. Need a lot of work on the grammar and spelling but otherwise a good story.

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Very different

Extra lot of sex and wish you had expanded on her at least meeting her daughters, if not part of their rearing. The end really surprised me but I'm hoping that book two is complete? Will be checking it out for sure. Some grammar errors in this and needs to be edited but otherwise well done.

Reread this one before moving on to book 2 just to be sure I remembered the whole story. Still has some spelling errors but a great read none the less.

Can't wait to read the next edition.

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Batman

What a delightful twist on an old story! I always wished he would find someone to love! Wouldn't have minded being that someone either in my younger years. Running out of your stories to read. Please tell me you have more coming?

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Lonely Monster

Loved it! You did it again. Was so glad to read that her father got what he deserved!

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The Nerd

What a great short story! Love how she stood up for her man!

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Because I want a kiss too!

I was wishing the story would never end! Are you sure they don't have any more brothers? A few sisters, cousins, friends? Loved this series! Grammar needs work in all of them but otherwise a great read!

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Craving those kisses!

Well, you've done it again! Loved this story! Can't wait to read another of your work! Keep em coming!

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Book 3

Loved the line "Best ride to the airport ever!" Took me a few minutes to stop laughing at that! I do hope that one of the future books is going to go into more detail not only for the 2 remaining brothers but about Shelly and Dean as well? If not, it sounds like an opening for Book #6? Have enjoyed everything you have written so far. Keep up the good work!

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Hunter

Thoroughly enjoying this series! Can't wait to go on to the next one! I've read 3 of your stories today and several over the past week, have enjoyed them all. You are a very creative person with a wonderful imagination!

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Good story

Can't wait to read the sequels to this series. Not exactly the ending I expected but I love happy endings.

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Truly

What a great ending to the series! Loved it! Looking forward to reading the next one! Do hope you will check out one of mine! Don't have a wolf one up YET! But it is coming!

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Forever love!

Loved this story! Survived a similar situation that she had with Mark and many times wished I'd find an Eric to rescue me but ended up having to do it on my own. Loved this story!

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Valentine

Well, you've done it again! Love your stories. This one you tended to shift from first person to third several times and I had to back up and make sure I'd read it right but enjoyed the story very much! Can't wait to read the next one! Keep em coming!

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Great love story!

This could definitely be a harlequin romance easily. Really enjoy your work! Hoping you will check out and enjoy one of mine!

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Great story!

You've done it again! Loved the story! Made me want to meet a vampire! LOL Found a few spelling errors and some words got left out in certain parts but I was able to fill in the spaces and really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work!

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Another excellent story!

You are a very talented writer I've enjoyed all of the stories I've read so far and look forward to reading more of your work! A few spelling errors but not so that it slowed me down much. Keep up the good work! Hope you will check out one of mine!

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Awesome story

I've read a lot of wolf stories and I have to say yours is one of the best I've read so far. Thoroughly enjoyed the characters and the story line. It was definitely different from anything else I've ever read. Had a few grammar errors but still giving it 5 stars since there were only a few. Look forward to reading more of your work. I haven't posted my first wolf story yet (need artwork for the cover) but will so. Hope you will check out one of my stories in the meantime and let me know what you think?

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Awesome Read!

Thoroughly enjoyed your book! Great read! Will look forward to reading more of your stories on here! Hope you will check out one of mine and let me know what you think. I'm working on a werewolf one as well but haven't finished proof reading, title and art work yet but will be putting it up as soon as those things are done!

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Upset!!!!!

I was thoroughly enjoying the story when it suddenly ended. You promised an ending but only have one story posted. I swear I'm going to give up reading Inkitt stories because so many people do not forewarn reader that their stories are unfinished or part of a series that has yet to be posted or you have to pay to read. Very frustrating! There were several grammar errors including needed words that were completely left out.

If you are not going to post the next series, please mark your story as being incomplete because that's what it is.

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Aura

Enjoyed your book very much. Was very different from the many other's I've read.

Got a little confusing in some spots but was still a good read. A few grammar errors but otherwise very well done!

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Good story

Really enjoyed the story except that it was really hard to tell who was saying what because you have entire conversations run together in paragraphs and not identified who is saying what.

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There were several other spelling errors but these were the main ones that were repeated through the book, which was otherwise a very good read! Will look forward to reading more of your work and hopefully you will correct these mistakes.

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Very well done!

Story was rather short but was a very good read! Only found a few spelling errors but thoroughly enjoyed it! Good work!

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Good story!

Enjoyed your story even with all of the spelling and grammar errors. Have to agree with Rita Mcintyre about the explicit sex scenes. Liked the ending very much as you left an opening for a book 3 but didn't leave this story unfinished. Good job!

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Loved it!

Grammar, spelling and punctuation needs some work but enjoyed reading it. Hope you will check out one of mine and let me know what you think?

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Good read!

Spelling, grammar and definitely punctuation needs help but I enjoyed your story very much. Felt that you could have expanded a little more, especially on descriptions of the characters since it was hard to picture what they look like.

Will look forward to reading more of your work.

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Good read!

Reminded me very much of the series on Nicholas Flammel by Michael Scott. This story needs some editing on spelling and grammar but otherwise was a very good read and I enjoyed it!

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Editing definitely needed

Apart from the grammar, spelling and punctuation errors, it's very hard to read when whole sections are missing. Chapter 24 is missing part of the beginning and seems to start in the middle of the sentence. Chapter 26 is very confusing right from the beginning as part of the story seems to be missing in more than once instance right from the very beginning. I think I'm going to stop and hopefully you will come make the required repairs. Let me know as I would like to finish reading it but right now, it's so disjointed that it's giving me a headache trying to keep up with what's happening.

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Book 1

Enjoyed the story overall. Needs editing.

A little long winded in some area's but realized you were trying to build background. Grammar, spelling and need to identify who is speaking at the time because it got kind confusing.

Need to explain what the whole prophecy is. Hoping Book 2 will reveal more details? Mr Sliver is a minister? Now there's a twist I really didn't expect since I've always understood that vampires can't go on to hallowed ground so he wouldn't be able to enter a church.

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A feel good story!

Loved your story! I felt her pain at being betrayed not only by her boyfriend but by her supposedly best girl friend. Wondering if her angel didn't have just a little bit of demon in him? LOL There were some punctuation, grammar and spelling errors but otherwise was very well written. Hope you will check out one of mine?

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Rejected Warrior

Thoroughly enjoyed your story! Only found a few grammar/spelling errors and got a bit confused over the Royal families name since it seemed to change somewhere along the line. Would definitely read more of your work! Hoping you will check out one of my stories!?!

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Book 1

I like the way you wrapped up this one better. Grammar and spelling need help but overall was well done. Still looking for Book 3. How many are there in the series?

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Incomplete

Plot was a good start to what could have been a great full length book. Grammar and spelling need work and it left too many unanswered questions. Feels like a draft of a much better story. Hope you will reconsider and add more or rewrite in more detail like what happened with her father and the man who tried to buy her and the rapist? Does Andrew end up accepting Nick?

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Green Grass Fox

The plot was good but this feels like a draft copy. Need more description on the characters, both on looks and on their thoughts and feelings.

Hoping you will check out some of my stories?

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1st letter, 1st number......

The plot of the story was good but the grammar, spelling errors and the fact that English is not your native language made it very hard to read. In a few places, you mentioned two characters names as being part of what was going on at the moment when the second character was not even part of that scene. Was a unique story. I thought that both Nick and Aidan had mentioned that they had gone to Lisa's funeral so how is it she is alive? Why did Aidan kill her if he loved her? Why did Macey help him? If it were me, I would add a flash back scene to what actually happened to her, how and why.

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Loved it!

Great story! I loved every chapter of it. Only a few slight spelling errors but very well done! Looking forward to reading more of your work and hope you will check out one of my stories as well.

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Unsure what to say

Not like any other werewolf stories I've read since they only seem to be able to shift during certain times of the year and only at night. The story started off moving very slowly but picked up speed as it got closer to the end but definitely feels unfinished.

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Awesome!

Thoroughly enjoyed your story. Could have had a bit more werewolf action but I still enjoyed it very much! Only saw a few spelling errors.

I haven't been on here all that long and was wondering what you mean by "Vote" for you? You also mentioned a site that pays the authors? Is there a fee to publish there? Look forward to your reply.

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Interesting.

Very interesting story. Needs LOTS of work on grammar, spelling and punctuation but hope you plan on only making it a two book series? Can't wait to find out what happens next!

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Very innovative!

Enjoyed the story very much. Very unusual and innovative. Some grammar errors but otherwise very well written!

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Please hurry!

Please hurry and finish the story! Enjoying it very much! Didn't see too many grammar errors in this section.

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Great story!

Enjoyed this one as much as Book one! Grammar still needs a bit of work but easy enough to fix with editing. I do hope Book Three is complete!

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Good read

Despite the spelling and grammar errors, it was a very good read! Enjoying the story and looking forward to reading the next edition. You tie the characters together very well. Would like to have heard more about her using her powers, especially since she's supposed to be learning about them but hoping there will be more in the next book.

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Unusual, to say the least

Very unique story. Lots of grammar errors and lots of unanswered questions and talk about ending with a cliff hanger! Overall, I enjoyed the read and will look for book 2.

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Awesome!

Very good story! I really enjoyed Hunters Moon and can't wait to read Part 3 of this series! Very well done! Keep it up.

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Psychic

As promised, I just finished your story. It started off a little rough but the story became much more fluid as it went on and you finished it great! This could easily be turned into a series. Only a few grammar and punctuation errors but I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Look forward to future works from you two.

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Very well done!

Just a suggestion to help with the grammar errors is to try and write your stories in word and using the spelling/grammar feature before posting. Otherwise, the story was great! Keep up the good work!

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Needs some work

Except for the lack of punctuation and not always being clear on who was speaking, I was enjoying the story. Still unclear as to what actually happened to his father? If his mother was a true mate and the mate legend is true, why is she still alive? So are B&E safe now? Every other story I've read, says the mating bond is not actually complete until they actually mate. Are you trying to keep it PG?

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Awesome!

Thoroughly enjoyed your story. Your brought forth some characters that I have not found in other stories (ie: the Dire Wolves, the fire fox, etc) Found a few spelling errors but managed to figure out what you were trying to say. Was shocked to see your one notation of 5000 words when I thought we were limited to 1500! How did you manage that? Looking forward to reading your future works. Hope you will give mine a shot! Very different than what you have here but hopefully you will enjoy them!

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Awesome!

Grammar still needs work and I got a bit confused as to what was going on and who was saying what but over all it's very good! I've always been a sucker for a happy ending!

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Loved it!

Grammar still needs help but loved the story! Can't wait to read the next edition.

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Good one!

This is the best of the three I've read so far! Grammar still needs a bit of help but otherwise you are filling in the blanks from the other two stories! Good job!

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Becoming clearer

Not sure why you chose to break this into a series of books but I'm enjoying reading them. Some spelling errors need to be fixed. You have "warped" or "warping" when it should be wrapped or wrapping. There are a couple more that I spotted when I was reading it but can't remember exactly what they were off the top of my head.

Glad to see the next in the series is ready to go and will continue to read because I have to admit I'm hooked and want to know the stories behind all of the characters and why they are the way they are.

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Good story

Needs more background information on the characters like what actually happened to Leon to make his pack turn on him? Did he kill someone? Who? Why? If not, who framed him? Why?

What happened to Ash's father to make him like he is? The end is kind of confusing as well. Grammar definitely needs some work but otherwise it's a good story. Look forward to reading the rest of the series.

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Well done!

A few parts had me a little confused, mostly as to who was speaking/thinking at the time but otherwise it was a very entertaining read. Enjoyed it very much!

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Very good ending

Well, done except for the grammar and spelling and punctuation. Needs LOTS of help but the story itself was very good. So glad you finally managed to finish it.

Well done!

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Great story

Thoroughly enjoyed your story. Looking forward to reading the sequel.

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Awesome read!

Enjoyed your story immensely. Great ending! Keep up the good work!

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Blood Moon

I'm really enjoying your story even with all the grammatical errors (sorry, but I was a secretary for many years so proof reading is a habit). I thought this was a finished work and wondering when the next/final chapters will be available?

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Eat the Rich

Had high hopes for this story but don't understand what the title means. Was very slow and rather boring for the first 16 chapters and almost gave up and then it was hit and miss. Finally got interesting near the end but you seem to be more intend on promoting another website to carry your works. If that is the case, why don't you just move the whole story there? Leaving this with so many cliff hangers and unfinished parts is just totally frustrating and turns me off of the idea of following you to another site.

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Hellcat

I was about half way through and about to give up because the story didn't seem to be going anywhere but then you surprised me and it suddenly became more interesting. Chapter 36 & 37 are exactly the same so you might way to go back and delete one of them. Common courtesy is when you use a foreign language you should translate what it means so that those of us who don't speak it can understand what was said (use italics or cursive in parentheses). What ever happened to her father? Why does she continue to live with her brother and his family once she turned 18? Story was a little juvenile for my tastes but the last half was pretty good except for the horrible grammar. You won't be able to use a spell check program to fix most of them but a grammar feature should catch the multitude of errors that I saw. I personally use word or google docs to write my stories before posting them. Sometimes I use slang or dialect for a specific area of the country that I'm writing about but try to keep the spelling correct or at least don't lay it on so heavily that someone not from that area can understand what's being said. Also when you jump from one point to another you should put up some kind of divider symbol such as ****** or ~~~~ between the paragraphs. Good first attempt. I'm not trying to be critical or hurtful and hope you find my comments helpful. It's only a desire to hopefully help you learn and do better in the future. Keep trying!

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