Great first chapter!
I've only read the first chapter but I think the author here did a good job. I love the story idea and the dystopian setting. The characters have such a unique background and motivating take on the unfortunate situation they've been thrown into.
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My feedback to the author is to pay closer attention to grammar and punctuation, and to vary the sentence structure. The way it is written now makes it hard to follow the story, and causes the reader lose a lot of the plot and characters. For example, you write "I remember it like it was yesterday, only I was a baby and all I could remember was yelling and a small impact and that's where it all started." A stronger way to write that sentence could be, "I remember it like it was yesterday. Even though I was only a baby, I can still remember the yelling and the small impact. That was when it all started." Obviously, there is more than one way to write that sentence, and a lot of it comes down to the writer's style choice! But make sure to avoid run-on sentences, and to use proper punctuation where it can't be avoided. I want to spend my time enjoying the story, rather than trying to figure out what the sentence is saying!
Overall though, a great start!