Tiya.

Too hurried

I would start off by saying that the plot is a bit intriguing but the writing style is as though you're in too much of a haste to get this book over with. Cohesion is completely missing and that really left me confused many a times. Like, at the end of one of the chapters, Alder had gone home, however, at the beginning of the next chapter, she was in school.
The grammar, though good, can be improved. Like there are some places where there should be a punctuation mark and there is none and at times, one isn't needed but you've put a comma. Even sentence case is messy at certain points.

The plot is promising, but the way it is presented makes it eccentric. I'm sure if you try working on it, you'll find this story doing better. :)

Can be worked upon

Well, there's not much that I have to say about the overall story. It is nothing out of the ordinary, predictable and a cliche too. However, there is hope and it can be worked upon alone by improving the grammatical usage, because cliches sell too, right?
The writing style and skills need tremendous improvement, especially with the tenses.
This review might seem harsh, but if taken constructively, will help definitely. :)

An enthralling read!

Let me start by saying that this book got me hooked!
Initially, I was a bit concerned about the number of chapters but once I got some insight of all the characters, I instantly found a connection building with most of them. The writing style is so amazing that you feel as though the characters are a part of the real world or you're a part of theirs. The plot - albeit slow, in the beginning, turned out to be great after a few chapters.
Honestly, I've got a few ships sailing too. And that's not normal for me to have a favorite otp in one of the unpublished novels - so that's how beautifully crafted this novel is. The world building is commendable as well.
I really hope this book gets published because it has got a lot of potential.