WickedMimi

My favorite past time is reading, it always has been. I thrive on a good book.

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Improvements needed

-I liked the story over all.

-Your editing skills need improvement. There were sentences that didn't make sense because it looked like you started a thought and then changed it partway through the sentence.
-You need to pick a tense and stay with it. Normally past tense is best because it come across as a story.
-The main characters had no real relationship other than sex. He came across as a pervert/stalker that she kept running from. Then they suddenly loved each other. You spent so much time writing the sex part that you forgot to make their relationship grow.

-I don't mean to come across as mean or harsh. This is purely constructive criticism.

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Great job!

You did a good job conveying the feelings and the growth of the characters. Keep up the good work! I'll keep my eyes open for more of your stories.

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