I have enjoyed reading this story
Your story is definitely out my of my usual zone, but I decided to read it anyways. Readers and writers can both learn many new things when we do this. As agreed, here is your review.
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I will start of by saying that, while this story is long,. it is great to read. I felt as though there was always something happening throughout each page, which made it interesting to keep reading. We start out by knowing a little bit of details for each character, as they develop and progress throughout the story. The story flows smoothly and builds up. You describe the situations of your characters well. It must be tough for anyone with anxiety to go out and make friends.
The good thing is your main character did. I like how you did not just keep her shy, awkward, and showed us that any limitation can be broken. Just like in real life, someone with anxiety can fall in love and share many great times with friends and their special someone. Having anxiety does not mean you are a loner or someone who never wants to have friends.. It is an actual issue that affects many people. Hopefully, others who can relate to this will enjoy reading your story. The pen pal development makes it feel as it is another story within the story. I like that because you immerse it, making it fit nicely giving us more details.
I will not state the same as others have, as they have touched on what happened in some scenes or what is missing. I will include what I caught at a constant.
As stated before in some comments, your story would read better if you add more breaks in some paragraphs and after each person speaks. Some chapters feel very long and never ending. Perhaps break your chapters into two continuous chapters or shorten them to get to the main point of your chapter. It would flow much better. and read better too. Your writing is impressive. I can feel the dedication you put into your story to make it come to life. You let us feel how the characters feel.
To those of you who like teen drama and high school flings, this is your book. It was out of my comfort-zone, but like I said, one can always learn something new. Congratulations on a wonderful story!