Zach Hughart

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Good Job!

Let's start with what is good. I love that the story is some type of murder game with some sort of potential
supernatural force involved. You only give as much back story as necessary to advance the story. I would like
more chapters please. Next, is the bad parts i picked up on. The first thing I noticed was that some of the paragraphs were a little long for my taste. The other thing I felt after reading the story twice was I had trouble remembering all the names of the characters. That could just be on my end, but i would bring that to your attention. I would some more details to what the characters look like to some degree. This might help me better remember the people in the story better.

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Good Stuff

You make it hard for me to find faults in your book. You do put into the people into my mind as if I am onlooker to the acts taking place. There was no slow parts in the story which was nice. Keep up the good work and give us some more. I know good stories when i see it and you have gotten it down here today.
The main thing that ate at me was the overly long paragraphs. It can be off putting to have such paragraphs. They are not wrong but it makes me want to skim over the longer paragraphs.

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