I cannot pronounce half the characters' names but I LOVE the action. Each scene is fast-paced and moving forward. I also like how each chapter seems to run seamlessly into the next. The chapters that end in questions are particularly good (What's your story? Why are you crying? Would it have been different? Ect.).Read the story now
This story is understated and more of a fantasy than anything else. But some scenes just scream romance (not to ooey-gooey romance but the sweet romance that makes me melt inside) and I love them. I would like to see more romance scene. The fantasy part is nice too but the romance is what sells it for me!Read the story now
I had a really excited Creative Writing Teacher in high school. She gave some strong critiques but was never short on praise when she enjoyed something. My teacher always complained that my writing style was too flowery. She said that I needed a "productive' writing style where each word brought me closer to a point.
Your story has the style my teacher was talking about. The blurb moved forward and each word had a purpose. I can't wait to read the finished work.
This is a great idea for a novel. I can see it going so many different places!
The action and fast pace really make it hard to put down. I can't wait to see where it goes. The brother could be an interesting character that really drives the story forward. He could also be a character with great dialog who snaps off jokes. It would be interesting to see what you could do with a boy-genius is captured story line. The concept has been done before but you have a unique writing style that could pull it off well.
I'm sure that you already have some ideas of your own and I can't wait to read them!
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