needs work, but good.
This story is currently unfinished, and I definitely want to see how it ends, but there are numerous areas that need work as well. Such as your paragraph breaks are in the strangest places. There should be a new paragraph whenever someone new is talking. It is frustrating to constantly have to stop and figure out who said what. There are some dropped words and you have a habit of repeating the same word in the same clump, thankfully it isn't the same word throughout the story. The main problem I have with the plot is you want the MC and the fuckboy to get together, but if they do he wins the stupid bet. I think it would work better if there was still one girl he hadn't slept with besides her, and by committing to her he gives up on his bet, but that's me. Also it comes off as a diary or something, you might want to consider either changing from the first person view, or adding a lot more about her emotions and stuff as she goes through everything- currently it is a bit flat, matter of fact this happened, followed by this. You want people to connect with all her emotions not just her physical attraction. Ethan is not only the guy who tries to make a move on MC, but also the one to trick them into talking, maybe one of those things should be done by one of the other guy friends. You have a really good base for this story, once you iron out the kinks, and fatten it up with a little substance, and end it, it could be great!!
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