I love it so much omg!
Read the story now
I’m such a harsh critique everything I read I’m INSTANTLY dismissing it because I got irritated with disorderly grammar and spelling or tense switching, ugh tense shifting gets under my skin so badly.
But your writing is good! Your grammar, spelling, punctuation and vocab are great! Your dialogue is FANTASTIC (with dialogue being my greatest weakness I always notice when someone has a good, realistic flow to character convos!!) And the overall premise of your story is captivating.
Also, you don’t use repetitive words or phrases and the way your sentences and descriptions flow together is organic and something most writers on here are lacking.
I can’t wait to read chapter 2 and meet Vladdy!!