Alex Fox

Detailed

I love how much detail and passion is put into the story I honestly couldn't put it down. There are some grammatical errors specifically when describing certain things where you can tell the author's thought process changes. I use to write like that quite often. My suggestion is to reread what you write out loud when editing and you can hear where the thought process needs completed or changed. Even I still make grammatical and spelling errors. The Passion is there <3 and I love it. Plan on reading the squeal

Engaging

It certainly drew me in- minor grammatical errors that became more frequent so they may still be editing. It was good- but once they as a couple came together it reminded me of kind of a fluff piece, they where predictable and semi unrealistic as a couple which was a tad frustrating since they are supposed to share a bond. It was like when you read a light hearted manga vs one with deeper emotions and depth. I was looking for a deeper connection with the two but instead it was pet names and pretty words. Overall though very good work and the writing style certainly draws in the reader as well as the subtle plotline.

Amazing plot

Once I read enough I started to understand the plot. I think some minor edits for the summery and some description edits for the first chapter to draw in the reader would make this 🏆 and surpass my published ones on Galatea. Amazing work. ❤️