I enjoyed this book quite a bit. The characters were engaging and funny. The plot was one I've read before in the "Witch of Blackbird Pond" the only differences being the place, time set, and characters. The writing style was decent, I could follow the story.
There were several words that are misspelled, so I would go through it again and fix that sort of stuff. I would probably also have someone proof read it for grammar. (I'm not an expert in grammar at all, so this is just coming from someone who also needs to do it)
It is definitely a Christian fiction book or Inspirational Fiction. So lovers of this type of book will enjoy this.
Thank you for sending me the message, I loved your story. I hope more people read it.
It took me a long time to finish, but it was worth it. I found the book very enjoyable but found some of the dialect writing awkward. I loved all the characters and enjoyed seeing the conflict. Not because I enjoyed it, but because it was realistic.Read the story now
This was a great book that brings forward feelings for me. I felt this girl's anger, sadness, and denial of her brother's death. I have felt similar things after my grandmother died. I did not read the dream she had because I could tell where it was going. I didn't read certain parts because of how close to home those feelings hit.
Overall, it is a fantastic book. I could read this constantly.
There were several punctuation, grammar, and missing word problems but it did not detract from the story. This story was very well done, enjoyable, and had an interesting enough plot. It took a while to finish. This story is not complete. I love it, but I want to see another book or have more chapters added to this one to complete it.Read the story now
I can't even describe how I feel about this story. I started it at 11:00AM and just finished it at 4:00PM. It held me from start to finish. All the characters are believable, the situation is believable, and it is so well written. I enjoyed this book a lot. If this book were in a store I would probably buy it.Read the story now
I had to speed read the story, to be perfectly honest. It was the only way I could get through reading about the sexual abuse. This is a very good story about being broken then finding an identity. It was easy to read in the area of grammar and punctuation. However, it was a very difficult read in the area of the detailed abuse.Read the story now
Like the first one I am intrigued by where this story is going to head. I loved your first one and I see a good deal of promise in this one as well. I feel bad for Lucus, I actually feel more pity and pain for him then Coraleth. Maybe I'll like her more as the story goes on. (I like her but I don't.)
They both said pretty hurtful things in this chapter I read (13) but her father was right. I look forward to watching her grow and mature in the story. (=
I wasn't sure what to expect when I read the blurb of the story, I wanted to read it mainly because it was Sci-Fi/Fantasy. I expected a book like one out of the Artemis Fowl series minus the Fae and I was not disappointed.
I love the character interaction and the plot buildup that takes place. I was disappointed when I discovered that there are only seven chapters. I had dedicated myself to this story for the long run and forgot I had picked one that was in progress.
I am looking forward to seeing more of this story, I'll be checking back in every once in a while for updates.
This is a very good story. I'm only on the 2nd chapter but because of my family member's different terrifying experience with the supernatural and my own nightmares/night terrors that stopped after an activity was stopped near us...I can't read anymore. It's too creepy for me.
The story is written very well and the details are perfect. The plot is interesting and I would read more if I didn't get the heebie jeebies. I love your writing style, it is very relaxed and matter of fact.
I really enjoyed this, I liked the fact that it was set in an alternate Western universe. I generally don't like Dialect writing because it can get hard to read, but it wasn't too unbearable. Thank you for writing this, it was interesting to read.Read the story now
I have to say, I wasn't sure what to think of the story at first. When you see someone in the opening scene stumbling home drunk, I wasn't sure how it would turn out. The ending was surprising and made me smile. I generally don't like cursing in a story, maybe it's because of how I've been brought up. I didn't mind the milder swear words, but in my opinion and experience, the F bomb doesn't really add anything to a story.
Overall I would say that this was an interesting read and there really was no way to tell how it would end until you got there. The only indication was the old man's first name. (=
If you are planning on writing more chapters, I would be thrilled to see how it truly ends.
This is a very interesting story. Very haunting and it kept me interested all the way until the end. The only thing that bothered me was the dialect speech. For some reason that has always thrown me off when reading a story. Otherwise, I really enjoyed it.Read the story now
I really enjoy the general plot, it reminds me of the romance novels my Grandma gives me to read. It seems like it could end up being a sweet story. The plot flew forward a bit fast, but in a romance novel that tends to be the case anyways. (=Read the story now
I wish I could like it
The Blurb had beautiful grammar and the story looked promising. Until I started to read it. The sentences were stilted and short. There were no paragraphs involved further on then it started to read like a script. This is not an acceptable way to write a story. I skipped ahead to further along in the story, that is when I noticed the script writing.
I wanted to like this story, it had such good promise. Please edit the story and write fuller sentences that are more fleshed out.
This story was fantastic. I give it a 4 because of the sexual situations. I thank you for not doing detail and hardly addressing the situations. I love Raven, I love Sophie, I love them all. Riker is my favorite though. It is very well written and I finished it in two=three days. Fantastic book.Read the story now
I loved this story. I had added it to my app reading list and couldn't put it down. It took me a long time to finish, but it was worth it. I would get irritated when people interrupted my reading. I look forward to the next book in the series.Read the story now
This story has potential but the style of writing was a little odd. It reminded me of fanfiction I've read. I think the one way this could be fixed is by merging some of the text to make complete paragraphs.
The beginning with waking up from a nightmare reminds me of the Hunger Games beginning (at least from the movie).
The chapters are a bit short, I would recommend merging some of them together to make a longer chapter.
The actual plot has very good potential, I am still curious as to how it ends.
I give this five stars all around because it was an amazing story. It is perfect as a short mystery and I thought it was going to be a lot creepier than it was. So I am really happy it wasn't as scary as I figured on it being. The writing was good and kept me interested to the end.Read the story now
This is a beautiful story, enjoyed reading it up until the very end. It brings back mixed emotions about death in general, but this story was so lovely and it made death seem peaceful. The writing style was excellent and it gave the background needed for the two characters added without making your story longer than you wanted it.Read the story now
Funny and cute
I enjoyed this story quite a bit. It was very humorous and classy. I was thrilled as I was reading it that it wasn't overtly nasty (As some stories can be) and I wouldn't be embarrassed to suggest this to my other female relatives. I was happy with the ending, I was shipping Holt and Avi until the very end, so I was happy with the conclusion.Read the story now
I am only on chapter three and I love this fanfiction. I added it to my reading list so I can finish it at a later time. This reminds me of both Star Wars and Star Trek. I am not sure if that is intended, but it is what I see in this story thus far.Read the story now
This was one of the best stories I've read. It ended sadly and not like I expected it to. I hated all the characters at some point in the story as much as I loved them all at some points in the story. It was perfectly balanced.Read the story now