Sparrowkeeper

The Hidden Fragrance

The grammar needs some help and buffing out. There is no need to have a lot of cussing within descriptions and “ass” could be paralleled with something else. Otherwise, the plot is really good and has been keeping an even fast burn pace which hooks the reader in and keeps them guessing what will happen next. Can’t wait for the next chapters, good luck

Dino Knights Book One A New Age

This is very different to what I'm used to reading, so I am sorry if this comes off as blunt. The plot idea was there, however description of characters and their movements, such as what is in their hands or adorned on their bodies, is needed to be altered. Also your referral to characters, which the mains do not know the names of, could be shortened, such as seen with Stygian being dubbed the "Biker guy", could have possibly been nicknamed the Biker until his name was known.