aesthetic_mess

17 // LG(B)T gang // I'm an actress, I love to write, I've got emotions spilling over the brim, I'm kind of wild. Not much else to say I guess. //Follow me on Wattpad: @DaugherOfApollo\\

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Great Read!

I had a lot of fun reading this! I love Arleigh's character and her friendship with Marlow. Grammatical and spelling errors were virtually nonexistent, which left for an easy comprehension. And your attention to detail is great! I have a considerable interest in dragons, and it's nice to find such a captivating story about them. I'll definitely keep reading!

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Enthralling!

First of all, wow. This beginning is great! It draws the reader in so they want more. I'm intrigued to see what happens next. And it's sad, which some would say isn't a good thing, but in my opinion, if a story doesn't make me feel something, it's not worth reading. Thanks for writing! Keep it up : )

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Purple Fever

I love your introduction to the characters and how you explained the background behind why some people had purple eyes and others didn't. It made it really easy to understand. Your style is well-written, but some of your sentences seemed kind of basic. I don't know if that's maybe because English isn't your first language, but I think your story is great nonetheless. Maybe just work on attention to detail and more complex sentence structures. But definitely keep writing! I'm interested to see where this goes : )

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Lovely writing style!

I love that you have a separate unique tone in each work. You're style is solid and you maintain excellent diction. There's also a level of emotion that's imperative in any sort of writing. All in all, you did good kid. I enjoyed it.

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Interesting

This story is really good. It definitely kept me interested, and the characters are well developed, although just a touch cliche (which isn't necessarily a bad thing when done right, like in this story). There was one or two grammatical mistakes, but other than that, it was a fun, easy read. I'm interested to see what happens next.

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Truly Inspiring

This piece portrays a sense of profound friendship, and the love that comes with friendship, and it also almost sends out a feeling of deep loyalty. I think you do a great job of showing the meaning of true friendship.

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Thought-Provoking

Well done! You provide a sense of simple elegance in your words, and I like your interpretations of love. It really makes one think. There's just one thing that you might improve. You seemed to get a bit repetitive at times, which could be an effect you're going for, or it could just be a lapse in the writing. I'm not sure which. If it's meant to be that way, great! If not, perhaps that's something you could work on. It would certainly make your readers more interested in what you write. But all in all, I enjoyed reading this.

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Very Original

This story is great. I like that you have a whole background to it and that it's actually set in the future, when most people would assume it's in the past because of the monarchy system. I think you could put a little more detail in the characters and setting, but all in all, it was a fun read. I'm interested to see how the Quest plays out. I would definitely recommend this to a fantasy lover. The Quest for magical items reminds me a little of Merlin.

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Compelling

What a thought-provoking story! I'm intrigued to see how it plays out. You keep the reader interested with your mystery and enigma. You seem to use relatively simple sentences, which can make the read almost tedious, but with a little added detail, and some commas linking sentences together, you could have a truly professional piece. Definitely keep writing it!

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Refreshing

Your style of poetry is definitely different from a lot of others, which is a good thing! It's refreshing to see a new style and talent. Your words are truly powerful.

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Intriguing

This story is really good. There were a few punctuation mistakes, but nothing atrocious that made it hard to understand. Its plot flowed nicely, and I really enjoyed the suspense. I feel bad for Alanis because she can't return to her home and she's discovered that they're not the people that she thought they were, and am definitely curious as to what happens next. I love the originality of it too. The plot is fresh and new, not over-used like so many. All in all, it was really fun to read!

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