Aneli Defanif

A Great Book!

I am a historical fiction reader as well as many other genres. You book stood out amongst those genres and made me want to read more. This is a good story and the only thing I could recommend to change or edit is if you use a free grammar resource such as Grammarly.

Skylar

I have a good sense of what is going on in your story. You have good direction. However, there is very little here for the content of your story and I do not know what your MC's like because you haven't introduced her.

A Thrilling Plot

This story has great potential and blazes with action. I can see it becoming a great hit!

A Very Cool Story

You have quite the thriller here. A story of a man with dreams and visions telling him about the future, and the story of a brother who lives a sort of wild life. This is great chemistry and I like your sense of direction with the story and you excellent wrap-up at the end.

You use of the first person is very good though at times it drags, you could look at maybe cutting down your explanations and then jumping more into the action. All in all, though this story deserves 5 stars!

NEAT

What an impressive book! I love sci-fi and this story is a really cool piece of work, and I very much enjoyed reading it. I hope that you keep writing and tell more stories in the future!

Taren is such an engaging character, and I look forward to reading more about him!

Elegant

Very well thought out. I like your attention to detail. Keep up the good work! Also, I would understanding on if your Matella is a male or female. Thanks, and have a great day!

Review

Hey,

Thank you for leaving a kind remark about my story, I'd like to return the favor. Your poetry is nice and you have good things to say in your work! I think it would be a nice little thing to be published.
Also, maybe look for any trouble spots with your grammar. I thought I saw one or two.
For any spots people miss with just being sometimes erring humans, I recommend Grammarly. I know this has helped me.

All in all, your work has great potential!

~Aneli

Lovely

Wow a great read! A very captivating book. It feels like this is the best book a person could enjoy on a fall afternoon. I love your style! It’s a lovely blend of POVs and I highly recommend this book!

Loved the Read

I think this is one of the sweetest, nicest stories I've read in a long while. It possesses character and deep and rich storytelling. I couldn't put it down!

Wow

This book had me hooked from the start. It looks all well and good, and then bam! You throw in the Scholar of Truth. I love your catalyst to kick off the and the many plot twists you have thrown in. Keep writing! I love your story!

Neat

This book has promise, and it has a great plot. The story itself is very interesting with Galen and his quest in seeking out the artifact which was stolen and your use of description is admirable.

The reason I put only two stars down for your grammar and punctuation is that you use a third person omniscient voice in your writing and it made the story sort of rough and hard to follow. You have a great style, but you need to consider using less description and more character-driven emotions. One other thing: I think your description of Virian could be a little less focused on how she looks and more on her character. It would make a reader a little more interested in her.

All in all, you have great potential!

Happy writing!

~Aneli Defanif