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Night and Ninja

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Summary

A story in poetry of epic proportions. Gather round and listen to the tale of a samurai and ninja...

Status
8yrs ago
Chapters
2
Rating
n/a
Age Rating
13+

Chapter 1

Long, long ago in old Japan

There was a wise and gracious man

He practiced daily with the sword,

And could hold his own against a horde.


He was a Samurai, and a skilled one too

In stressful situations, he knew what to do

In battles raging fifty feet in the air,

He could concentrate in all his fear.


However, the one thing he always feared

Was a Ninja either far or near

Those sneaky spies with limitless tricks

Would always a prominent target pick.


He knew Ninja slinked all around

Some as daimyos with their gold in pounds

Some as simple farmer folk

Men who were slaves or finance-broke.


Ninja were a fearful problem

He wished some man could stop them

He cried to all the gods

To stop those Ninja, those vile dogs.

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I love how you have played with different words to introduce this story. Keep up the Good work. Excited for more!

8 years
author

This is very good in terms of meter and rhythm; the grammar is good too. One thing I would say is to try to avoid half-rhymes as much as possible (gods/dogs, problem/stop them) if you want a really strict rhyme scheme, and that the cover says 'knight' whilst the title says 'night' - which is the correct one? That being said it's hard to write a poem that tells a story and you're doing well to convey a plot.

8 years

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