Kayliani Jessica Powlison

Coeur d’Alene

Japanese language and Marketing double-major! Current stories: Ness, First Chances

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Interesting

It’s a little short to contain every detail, the reader is left wondering about some things.

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Could use a little more character development?

The action relating to the title nearly takes up half of the book, drawing out the beginning and the set-up for a long time. From the start, we as readers already know what is to come, so the long introduction leading up to his search for Cassandra is a bit difficult to get through.

Many people dislike Jan as a character, I've noticed. I don't like him either, but he is just a character. I couldn't bring myself to root for him, though, when all he gave us were patronizing thoughts and a flawed idea of what family should be. To be honest, there were not many characters I could bring myself to like. Not Stefi, not Wack, not Jan nor Jan's kids... not Anna... and especially not The Voice (Cassandra) in Jan's head. With little to no character development throughout, it was hard to stay interested in the story. While the plot was interesting in its original premise, there was little actual action that occurred throughout.
If what the author is going for is mundane-ness, but also twisted thoughts in the mind of Jan, I think he's nailed it. However, this story definitely isn't for everyone.

I thought it was also a little strange that the author put in a plug for another one of his books in ch30 with Trent under the tree...

As for the twist ending: I kind of expected it? There wasn't much suspense, just a mindless Jan wanting babies the whole time, and wanting to meet this person that's haunting him. I think this story lacks a very much-needed spark.

For grammar, there are quite a few typos per chapter (misspellings of words) and there are some hefty paragraphs that are often difficult to get through.

The ending is very unfulfilling, for a reader that enjoys tying up loose ends. Without mentioning any spoilers, I do have to say the ending was unexpected and left a sour taste in my mouth.

The author DOES do good job of painting the image of a psychopath that wants kids and that's it--he doesn't care for his wife nor his friends. He is the kind of egomaniac that has to be right and everyone else is wrong. It's not easy to make a character so dislikeable!

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Tear-jerker!

While I see a clear bias in this story, there were many wonderful moments where you captured the reality of characters interacting with each other that is so hard for authors to do! Pamela was very realistically-portrayed, as a young wife with a hard time choosing what she should do.

You’ve successfully brought the readers into your storytelling by issuing Mathilda later in the beginning as a sudden first-person POV change. It works well! I jumped right into her shoes and felt her pain and confusion. I think this book cleverly tells of the ways of abortion and how its result is baseline stealing the potential life (career, personality, etc) of another. It’s truly heartbreaking.

Well done!

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A Truly Suspenseful Masterpiece!

Though only a fraction of the story is published, The Trident is gripping in its writing style, as well as the characterizations made throughout! Ray and Gwen have a lot of growth even though there are only 6 parts published here on Inkitt. I didn't expect the narration style, but I quickly grew to like it and will most definitely continue reading. I believe it can be difficult to create a detective story without sounding too much like Sherlock Holmes, but The Trident is sure to break those stereotypes. Very well-written and thought out, and the careful attention to voice makes the read a breeze!

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Agni: A suspense-driven page-turner!

Though the grammar is not perfect, the author has a clear gift with tone and words! From the start, Agni places the reader in suspense as an "earthquake" rattles homes and the head of the tribe knows something is coming. The story is wrapped up wonderfully with a positive feeling of continuing adventure and will certainly not leave readers unsatisfied!

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