has room for improvement
Right off the bat I noticed some grammatical and spelling errors but that can be easily remedied with some editing and proofreading. The story's premise is interesting and the plot intriguing. But I would suggest changing up the synopsis a little.
Read the story now
Suggestion: The introduction in the beginning was okay but could be a bit better. How about trying to put up a thrilling scene instead? since this story is a thriller, that would certainly interest possible readers to read on further. You could also skip on the lines of "Join Blaire...and co. etc." since according to my coach in school publication before, since the reader would most probably read, there's no reason to mention that since they'll do that anyways.
Anyway, i hope my suggestion helped and this is also speaking for myself since my story also has a lot of these problems. Your story has potential and i hope you'll continue to do your best in completing it!