What is your opinion?
An effective work of flash fiction
"They say that brevity is the source of wit, but it's also often the source of fear. A piece of flash fiction that involves a single murder is often too linear, but I really liked the layer of fear and betrayal that underlined the story here. We're truly in the perspective of an innocent and her fall is heartbreaking."
Excellent
"Wow! This was really neat! Short and to the point, but done in an artistic way. The way this was formatted reminded me of a poem. You managed to capture that desperate, fleeting feeling, as well as the ever approaching doom that awaits the main characters. Her depiction of hell is something that's realistic, yet very sinister. The overall flow was great too. Excellent work!"
Wow.
"This short story reads like a poem almost. The clarity of art is seen easily when reading this piece. At first glance I couldn't believe how short it was. Then, once I finished I wanted more. Why did this happen? Who is falling? These questions tumble in my head now, as I try to make a story of the situation. The depiction of the character's "Hell" I can't imagine it any better. Well done. Please write more."
Review of Hell's Laughter
"This one reminds me of the 1800's writer named Ambrose (Bitter) Bierce also Edgar Poe. The story has a consistent point of view that is creative. The series of events or observations by the protagonist are disturbing to say the least. Maybe some before and after observations may add depth. What does the afterlife look like? I don't know I'm just asking. Continue writing. Great job! Sincerely Matt_Darrow."
That was.....
"brilliant writing! So much said in so few words. I could picture the fall, the surroundings and the person looking down as their victim plunged to their death. Thank you for sharing this intensely powerful very short story. I saw in another review it's called a "Flash Fic". Hope to see more of these from you. Crystal"
What a wonderful nibble
"I love when flash fiction is so DAMN satusfying. Great job in describing the reality of what it must be like to be in this situation. The feelings and emotions rush in as fast as the story progresses. Look forward to reading more delicious morsels of horro from AW."
This gave me chills.
"Wow, this short, short, little story scared me in a big way. The last line gave me chills. The writer uses vivid imagery to depict one brief moment in the fleeting time between life and death. The whole story takes place in the few seconds it takes for the character to die. Very cool."
Great story!
"I enjoyed this piece of flash fiction very much. I've never read such a good description of someone falling to their death. Well done! I like how the character is more focused on who pushed her than on death itself."
Slick Little Read!
"Flash fiction isn't easy to pull off but this is a good example of it done well. Your descriptions are solid and I applaud the overall idea behind this tale. The tense used seems to sway a bit in how the descriptions go. Some word choices if different would make some of this pull together a bit more tightly. Some examples: "Clouds cover the moon, and erase the stars" > "Clouds cover the moon, erasing the stars." Getting rid of "and" and changing "erase" to erasing fit the tense of everything happening now better. "Everything goes black. And this…this must be hell. Because I can still hear that laughter." V "Everything is going black...this must be hell, because I can still hear that laughter." Again just a matter of making the story flow better in the present tense. It could be written off as a matter of preference, this is your story after all :) Just critiquing and offering you another way chose your words. Hope you find this helpful! Cheers! - George ."
