What is your opinion?
Call of the Zodiac
"First I want to say that I also love your title, it can be very hard to come up with a title and I think this is one of the best I've seen here. Your descriptions are very vivid, they pull me into the story right away, though sometimes I thought the descriptions did slow the story down a bit since there were so much of them, but I also add in a lot of descriptions in my work so I guess I shouldn't nitpick too much. Overall the descriptions are beautiful and create a great picture of every scene. I liked the interactions between the characters and wish there was a bit more dialogue since the descriptions do seem to take over the scenes, but I do like how the plot is moving along and it makes you want to know what's going to happen next."
Call of "Cancer"
"The title is what drew my attention to your story. Interesting first chapter you've got here. I'm quite curious to read the rest. Are you Romanian, or do you just happen to speak Romanian? It was a pleasant surprise finding some of the language incorporated in your story. Keep up the good work."
Great start
"The settings are created with such detail and wonderful phrasing--anorexic trees leaning askew, lingering lime fog. Beautiful. I think there might be too many adverbs, especially when they're used in succession. Plot wise, I think it's really clever that the girl who is somehow a key to a fish talisman and even named Fischer, has a natural enemy in a bird. The family in the neighborhood is very suspicious and curious to see how Aspen ties in with the women in the first scene. Good luck in the contest. I'm so far impressed."
Great so far!
"This story is great so far! The title intrigued me enough to click the link, but your exceptional descriptions of the scenes and the interactions between the grandmother and granddaughter are kept me reading! Your use of cliffhangers are also really good! I can't wait for the rest!"
Great story!
"Wow, this really left me hanging! I want to know what happens next! The writing in this was really great, especially toward the beginning. That first description you give us is just great. Although we are only acquainted with them for a little while, your characters feel very real and tangible. The interactions between grandmother and granddaughter was very good, and I want to know if the grandmother survived the ordeal! I liked the idea of the crow and the strange incantations. Your ending was very abrupt and it leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next. My only complaint would be that I wanted more description during the part where they are flying. It was dealt with very casually, so I didn't really have a picture in my mind. It might have been an opportunity to explore the setting of the story a little more. Anyway, great work! Let me know when and if you post more of this story, because that cliff-hanger is killing me!"
