What is your opinion?
Good
"I like the plot somebody who likes vampire stories"
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"Such a great masterpiece. You can broaden your audience by publishing your story on NovelStar Mobile App."
Blood Reign
"First off, your writing style is excellent and very, very effective. You have used the right words everywhere to describe the feelings and emotions of each scene - had me turning the pages. However, I wish you had done this throughout the story and not just in a few places. Also, many of the sentences are too long and hence, complex. They can be broken using punctuation marks. There are slight grammar errors and some spelling mistakes, which can easily be rectified with a quick edit. The tense keeps changing from the present to the past and from the future to the past. Please stick to one of these throughout the story. Like I've mentioned before, in the in-line comments, this plot is inspired! I'm very excited for this story, as it has a lot of scope, provided it's used in the right way. The plot is zooming past, with no time for the reader to grasp the beautifully expressed emotions. There was no time for me to feel for the characters. You need to work on this a little bit more. Otherwise, this story has great potential. I'm looking forward to reading more!"
Blood Reign
"I wished there were more to the story, not sure if it is over or they are going to continue on writing. Ended abruptly but what was there was good. "
nice story
"well i agree your stury is moving fast but all the same i like your character description. and also your first persson view is actually reall good"
Review
"The story has an interesting start, and then the plot was moving too fast. Although I like dynamic actions, a lot has happened in the first five chapters. I'm not saying the book is bad, but the idea is perfect, it just needs to be more elaborate. I couldn't understand Shelly because she forgot Adriana so quickly and immediately became Cornelius' queen. Don't let this discourage you because you have a really good idea for the story. Keep writing and elaborate the topic a bit more."
Good Read!!
"I thought this was a good read and as it is only the beginning who knows what heights the story may go to! I was enthralled by Draven but i was very curious to know what he looked like. I think the castle is well set up and has many possibilities for limitless scenarios. I think like any good writer the key here is editing, there are missing words, extra words and some missing punctuation. Reading your work out loud is a good way of catching those pesky mistakes, and even better a friend with fresh eyes is a good source of editing too. I am still finding mistakes in my own work and i have edited it countless times and also had a friend look it over. So i wish you lots of luck in this and urge you to make the corrections so your work is easier to read and more polished. The story is good, the platforms are solid and your characters are very believable. All in all you have a pearl you just need to wash off the sand. Keep writing and good luck with this story, I look forward to more."
Just the little things
"Okay, it took me a moment to gather my thoughts. Your descriptions are easy to visualize. There a few grammatical errors, but nobody is perfect. The plot was easy to follow, nothing too overly complicated. I tried to find some holes, but none at the moment. And your character's dialogue seemed genuine, there is nothing worse than forced dialogue. And I think you handled it nicely."
A fun and intriguing story
"A very intriguing tale full of potential plot twists and enjoyable characters!"
Near excellency
"I thought I'd be bored reading it but this story caught me off guard and I really enjoyed the first 2 chapters thoroughly and incited to see what you've reserved for more upcoming chapters. So keep up the good work and bring on more!!"
Cool!
"I really enjoyed the premise of your story. Your characters seemed realistic, and I liked your plot. I am sorry about the low ratings, but I want to explain them. I loved the story, but it is in need of a little bit of editing (I hope you will take this constructively.) First of all, review your text for punctuation, extra words, and too long sentences. Many of your sentences went on for too long. Try cutting a few of them. Also, you tell instead of showing. To remedy this, I'd suggest more description (to give us an idea of the setting and characters - I'm really curious about what Lord Draven looks like!) and also more dialogue. Take time on the different scenes. Show us the MC talking with her boss. Show their body language to portray what they're feeling. That was all I didn't like. But now to the positives: I loved the eerie feeling you created at the end. You gave us dreams and mystery and the unknown. Furthermore, your characters are interesting. I would love to pursue a journalist's adventure - and with Lord Draven, the mystery is heightened. This could become such a beautiful book! It has a strong plot. It just needs a little work, but even so, I enjoyed it!"
