What is your opinion?
Strong Chapter One
"I think that the strength of the beginning is your chapter one- a character we are interested in and a slow reveal of character. This hooked me. I would actually recommend scrapping the Prologue- feels like an info dump (the blurb too in a way). I think your writing is stronger when it's the actual story. Looking forward to more! Hope that you can return the favor... https://www.inkitt.com/stories/scifi/239504?utm_source=share_author"
Great book
"A very creative writing. It got me hooked right from reading the blurb. I love it"
Amazing
"I can say that this is an amazing book. There are a few missing commas here and there, and sometimes it's hard to figure out who is saying what, but otherwise, this book is great! I recommend you let the book sit for a while before rereading it and fixing all the mistakes. Otherwise, I loved this book! -Ellie"
We want more!
"Phenomenal set up of what's to come! The prologue teases the reader and leaves them wanting to know more. You've done your job well!"
In love with this world
"So, to begin, I loved the world and the setting the story was set in. I loved the way it was depicted and the overall ambiance of it. The prologue is very captivating and makes you curious for more. I really liked that about it. The first chapter is very interesting as well, showing a bit of the world and Khyber's role in it. It explains a bit of what is going on but just not enough to satisfy your curiosity, which makes you read on and on and on until you finally get the answer you seek for. Though, I thought that the flow of the story wasn't that pleasant to read at times. The missing commas plus how the sentences were formulated didn't appeal to me much. I had to think too much about what exactly was happening to really get into the story. Many words were also overused, like 'highway' and 'green plants'. This also caused for the story to lose its flow. Reading it through should solve this mistakes, tho. Overall I can see potential in this story. it certainly had its attractive and unique qualities that each success novel needs. Now it's all up to the author how they want it to turn out. I wish you the best of luck, keep writing this excellent story of yours and show the world that there is no boundaries when it comes to the human mind!"
Characters to feel for
"It's only a prologue but I already feel bound to your lead and her brother. You have done very well with showing her concerns and internal struggle (without being overwhelmingly emotional). I have to say this is my new Inkitt favourite and I can't wait to explore more of the world you've built"
