What is your opinion?
Action Packed
"I love how Aisha/Lily isn't a damsel in distress and sorts things out on her own. I like where this story is going, you've really hooked me in :) The only thing is that you should check your grammar a little bit, then the book will be perfect!!"
Awesome-ly Extraordinary
"I love your writing style, it's fierce and its inkitly-awesome, you guys should simply give this story a chance, you won't regret it."
Awesome-ly Extraordinary
"I love your writing style, it's fierce and its inkitly-awesome, you guys should simply give this story a chance, you won't regret it."
THE She-ro
"Finally, a heroine who does not assistance! Give Aisha-Lily a chance and she would win you over!"
Unique
"The fact I loved about your story was that it was unique. Everyone writes about bad boy and good girl. Me too. But I loved your new approach. The bond between the characters was awesome. Just describe things a little bit more. There is some attention needed on the grammar everything else is awesome. Amazing. Keep writing. I would love to read more. "
Ruenigami Here.
"You need lots of Tlc, but that is fine, my first draft for Priestess and Slave was horrible, but a little (I mean a lot!) Fixing helped. So you do have lots of mistakes so read through it. Just think of this as a class assignment, you gotta reread! Also, just a suggestion, you don't need Aisha's P.O.V. Just put Aisha in italicized. Don't underestimate the intelligence of the reader, I've done it before and I never got anywhere till I stopped doing it. But overall the plot is good, a little cliche but in a good way. Hoping for more, but I would have rated plot more since I don't know how it will unfold, so it may be biased right now."
Grammar!
"I love the characters and the main ones spunk. However, grammar is in need of fixing! Along with a bit of editing. And the "Bad boy", Maybe you should make him fall in love with the bad girl slowly instead of right away. And how can they kill her at school? There should be a fight outside of school or she get's kidnapped by them. It would make the story more exciting that way, and less confusing."
Would be great with some editing
"Like others have said, this is a unique story with interesting and engaging characters and twists - definitely not your typical school romance. However, it is disrupted by the grammar and spelling needing some work. Don't worry though because as any publisher will tell you an editor is essential. Editors and proofreaders will read through your work if you ever submit it to a publisher, and check through the grammar so it is fit to be printed. You definitely have potential as a writer."
Editing required
"Your work sounds unique in terms of character personalities and diversity. However, there are a lot of editing required in terms of spelling and grammar. Considering a lot of these mistakes are evident, it breaks the flow, hence Grammarly or similarly grammar correction software could be used. There is no fault in using media to showcase your characters, but as an author, it is preferable to put in the effort to describe your characters exhaustively.. It is not a wastage of time (show but not tell through words) And please avoid putting up author's notes in the middle of the chapter. That sounds like a lot of pointing out from my side, but I hope you keep going!"
