What is your opinion?
Thrilling
"I love the way you described your character. It's very realistic and the way you portrayed her emotions made me feel like I was the one feeling them. I also love the plot. It's thrilling and extremely captivating. Good call with the cliffhangers too. It leaves you no choice but to keep reading like a possessed man/woman. I love your writing style to. Your grammar is near perfect. The only criticism I can come up with is your punctuation. Though it's hardly a problem. I recommend every book lover to read this."
Very good beginning!
"I do like how you opened your story (the first chapter specifically) by letting your reader feel the fear and confusion of your main character, while also planting some seeds of questions that hopefully will be answered in the future chapters. I also quite your characterization, how you portray a character while avoiding bogging down the story with too much details. You leave space for your reader to imagine some of the details for themselves, creating an unique experience for everyone. If I may give a bit of critique, you sometimes relapse into forgetting '.' or forgetting ','. However, those are minor details, of course! I also really like your usage of cliffhangers, keeping your reader engaged and anxious (in a good way) to read the next chapter. Keep up the good work, and have fun writing the next chapters!"
Pretty enticing story so far
"Oooooh I especially like how the chapter ended! Very suspenseful. I think that your writing style is excellent, coherent and not haranguing. Your grammar and punctuation are almost immaculate save for a little tiny missing comma in the description. As for spelling, “came home from ice skating practise” should be practice with a c. I don't really understand why some paragraphs don't have a line separating them, but formatting isn't that much of a deal. I do enjoy the story so far! You have captured the protagonist's horror and grief very well and I look forward to future chapters! :)"
